Question

17．假设你是李华，一名高三学生，在网络上看到一所国外大学的招生信息 （admission information），该大学对中国学生开设30多个专业，你对此非常感兴趣，打算用英语撰写一份个人申请，主要内容包括：
1．想申请的专业；
2．个人优势；
3．进入大学后的设想．
注意：1．词数：100左右；
2．书信格式已给出；
3．可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯．
Dear Sir or Madam，
I have recently noticed the admission information of your university onthe Internet．I'm writing to apply for management among all the majors offered to usChinese students．
For one thing，I do well in English and it will be easy for me to complete the coursesin your university．For another，I have been the monitor during my school years，which has promoted myorganizing ability．Having organized a few school activities successfully，I'm determined to be amanager as my dream job．Therefore，my plan is to join the Students'Union and participate in somemeaningful social activities to learn some advanced management experience．
I'm looking forward to hearing from you soon．
Yours Sincerely，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本文是一篇提纲作文．根据所提供的材料信息，向对中国学生开设30多个专业的国外一所大学写一封申请书．写作要点包括：1．想申请的专业； 2．个人优势； 3．进入大学后的设想．时态以一般现在时为主．人称以第一人称和第三人称为主．重要短语：apply for…（申请…），offer sth to sb（给某人提供某物），do well in …（在…方面做得好），promote my organizingability （提升我的组织能力），be determined to do （下定决心做某事），participate in （参加），hear from sb（收到某人来信）．
【高分句型】
1．I have been the monitor during my school years，which has promoted my organizing ability．
这里是which引导的非限制性定语从句，which在从句中作主语，指代前面整个主句的内容．
2．Having organized a few school activities successfully，I'm determined to be a manager as my dream job．
这里是现在分词的完成式 Having organized 作原因状语，主句的主语是I与动词organize构成逻辑上的主动关系．

解答 Dear Sir or Madam，
I have recently noticed the admission information of your university onthe Internet．I'm writing to apply for management among all the majors offered to usChinese students．（想申请的专业）
For one thing，I do well in English and it will be easy for me to complete the coursesin your university．For another，I have been the monitor during my school years，which has promoted myorganizing ability．【高分句型】（个人优势）
Having organized a few school activities successfully，I'm determined to be amanager as my dream job．【高分句型】Therefore，my plan is to join theStudents'Union and participate in some meaningful social activities to learnsome advanced management experience．（进入大学后的设想）
I'm looking forward to hearing from you soon．
Yours Sincerely，
Li Hua

点评 提纲作文在写作时要注意内容是否包含了所有要点．写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次，平时需注意积累短语和重要句型．