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3．假定你是高三学生李华．上个月月初你在网上买了一双鞋．但是，收到货后发现存在若干问题．请你就此给卖家写一封投诉信．
要点如下：
1．介绍购物情况；
2．反映存在问题；
3．提出解决方案．
注意：
1．词数100左右；
2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯．
Dear Sir/Madam，I am one of your customers．I ordered a pair of shoes for my mum as a gift on Women's Day．To my disappointment，there are the following problems．
To begin with，it didn't arrive on schedule，which missed the Women's Day．（高分句型一）Besides，not only is it the wrong size but it is also of wrong color．What bothers me most is the quality of the shoes．（高分句型二）They are not made of genuine leather，which give off bad smell．（高分句型三）（反映存在问题）I am not satisfied to have received such poor service，and I am qualified to ask you to handle it．I hope you can either return my money or deliver a new pair to me．（提出解决方案）
Looking forward to your reply．
Yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于提纲类作文，根据提示信息 假定你是高三学生李华．上个月月初你在网上买了一双鞋．但是，收到货后发现存在若干问题．请你就此给卖家写一封投诉信．写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，明确几个要点：介绍购物情况；反映存在问题；提出解决方案．2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态．4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：To my disappointment令我失望的是；To begin with首先；on schedule按时；Besides另外；not only，but （also）不仅而且；give off发出；Look forward to盼望；
To begin with，it didn't arrive on schedule，which missed the Women's Day．（高分句型一）
What bothers me most is the quality of the shoes．（高分句型二）
They are not made of genuine leather，which give off bad smell．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear Sir/Madam，
       I am one of your customers．I ordered a pair of shoes for my mum as a gift on Women's Day．To my disappointment，there are the following problems．
       To begin with，it didn't arrive on schedule，which missed the Women's Day．（高分句型一）Besides，not only is it the wrong size but it is also of wrong color．What bothers me most is the quality of the shoes．（高分句型二）They are not made of genuine leather，which give off bad smell．（高分句型三）（反映存在问题）I am not satisfied to have received such poor service，and I am qualified to ask you to handle it．I hope you can either return my money or deliver a new pair to me．（提出解决方案）
        Looking forward to your reply．
                                                                                                                                                                                                      Yours，
                                                                                                                                                                                                      Li Hua

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．