Question

12．一家英语报社向中学生征文，主题是寻找身边的榜样．请根据下列要求完成短文．
1．身边的榜样是谁；
2．主要事迹/表现．
注意：1．词数100左右：
2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯．
                                                              

Answer 1

分析 这是一篇提纲类作文，根据题目要求可知要用第一人称来叙述，时态应该以一般过去时态（论述过去发生的事）和一般现在时态（表示他的影响）为主．文章主要分成三部分：一 点题，说明要叙述的对象；二 叙述他的主要事迹以及影响；三 表示感谢．
高分句型：
1．Not only my teachers and classmates，but also（和前面的not only 表示"不但…而且"） my mother always scold that（引导宾语从句） how stupid I was．
不但老师和同学，而且我的妈妈都指责我太愚蠢了．
2．Because of his patient and good teaching（原因状语），I（主语） found （谓语）maths was so interesting（宾语从句） and became（和found并列的谓语动词） good at it day by day．
由于他的耐心教导，我发现数学是如此有趣，渐渐地擅长数学了．

解答 When comes to role model，people always think about some pop stars or heros，but my role model is my grandpa（点题）．
       Grandpa is a simple maths teacher．when I was a child，I'm thin and weak in sports and maths．Not only my teachers and classmates，but also my mother always scold that how stupid I was（高分句型一）．But grandpa always encouraged me that"don't give up，just try again"．Becides，he also helped me with maths．Because of his patient and good teaching，I found maths was so interesting and became good at it day by day（高分句型二）．What's more，I became to know that very often a disappointment some times can becomes a turning point for a wonderful experience to along．（主要事迹）
Now I want to express to grandpa that how greatful I am，and his words"don't give up，just try again"are also deeply in my heart．（表达感谢）

点评 这是篇提纲式的说明文，要求考生以根据要点介绍一个身边自己学习的榜样．在写作的时候，根据要点的内容进行写作．在写作时要注意各个内容要点的不同而使用不同的时态．首先，身边的榜样，应该使用一般现在时，而他/她具体做的事情与事迹，要以一般过去时为主．除此以外，要注意写作过程中注意使用平时学到的短语和句型，注意行文的连贯和逻辑性．