Question

【题目】假如你是李华，现在你写一封信告诉你的外国朋友Peter如何保持健康，要点如下

1.健康对我们任何人来说都是最为重要的；

2.注意你的饮食，均衡饮食；

3.锻炼是必要的；

4.要养成良好的生活习惯，不抽烟，多休息。

注意：词数100个左右，开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。

Dear Peter,

I am writing to you to tell you something about health.

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Yours,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Peter,

I am writing to you to tell you something about health．Health is the most important thing for us. In order to stay healthy, we need some common knowledge．

Firstly, pay attention to the diet．We should eat lots of fruit and vegetables，because they are rich in fiber and low in fat．Don’t have a lot of food that contains too much fat，such as butter．Don’t drink too much coffee，either．

Secondly, exercise is necessary．Regular exercise can help us keep from getting fat．People who do running every day usually have stronger hearts than those who don’t．

Finally, form good living habits．We should sleep for about 8 hours at night，and never work too hard．What’s more, stay away from cigarettes．

Yours，

Li Hua

【解析】本篇书面表达属于提纲类作文，根据提示信息写一封信告诉你的外国朋友Peter如何保持健康，写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，要弄清题意，确定文章的要点：健康对我们任何人来说都是最为重要的．注意你的饮食．均衡饮食．锻炼是必要的．要养成良好的生活习惯．不抽烟，多休息几个方面来讨论该话题 2、列出简单的提纲，安排好层次段落，铺设好过渡，处理好开头和结尾。3、注意句式要灵活多变，使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．

亮点分析：本文结构紧凑，层次分明。连接词“firstly…secondly…finally”等的使用，使整个文章连贯，前后表达浑然一体。在句中大量地运用了一些较高级的词汇如“pay attention to，be rich in，What's more，stay away from等，句式较为灵活多变，简单与复合句相结合，并运用了非谓语等，增添了文章的可读性。文章中运用的复合句如下：

宾语从句：I am writing to you to tell you something about health．

动词不定式作状语：In order to stay healthy，we need some common knowledge．

状语从句：We should eat lots of fruit and vegetables，because they are rich in fiber and low in fat．

定语从句：Don’t have a lot of food that contains too much fat…

定语从句：People who do running every day usually have stronger hearts than those who don’t．

祈使句：form good living habits