Question

【题目】假如你是李华,来自阳光中学。你校乒乓球队应邀去澳大利亚一所中学参加中学生乒乓球友谊赛。请你给举办学校联系人Mr.Williams写一封邮件询问相关事宜,要点如下:

1.接受邀请,表示感谢;

2.询问食宿、交通及比赛日程等方面的安排;

3.提出相关建议。

注意:

1.词数100左右;

2.可以适当增加细节,以使行文连贯;

3.开头语和结束语已为你写好,不计入总词数。

Dear Mr.Williams,

I am Li Hua,a student from Sunshine Middle School.

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Thank you for all your help and look forward to your reply.

Yours,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Mr. Williams,

I am Li Hua, a student from Sunshine Middle School. We are delighted to accept the invitation to play a friendly table tennis match, which will no doubt strengthen our friendship. I am writing to learn about the arrangements.

Since it is the first time for us to go to Australia, we’d like to know the details about the accommodation so that we can make some preparations in advance. We prefer to live in host families to experience local culture. Besides, is it possible for you to pick us up at the airport after our arrival? Also, I would appreciate it if we could work out a proper schedule for both sides.

Thank you for all your help and look forward to your reply.

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】这是一篇提纲类作文。文章内容要点已经给出。同学们在写这篇文章时，要注意以下几点：1. 通篇以一般现在时态为主。2. 要点要齐全。但是不要对要点进行简单的罗列翻译。可以使用适当的连接词，使上下文行文流畅，衔接自然流程。3. 注意语气。既然该文是询问相关事宜，所以要注意语气应该比较客气，不要采用命令式的语气。该文的写作难点在第二条内容上：询问食宿、交通及比赛日程等方面的安排。很多同学容易用三四个问句将该内容表达出来。这样写的话，很容易造成句式单调，给人一种“翻译句子”的感觉。还有部分同学会用一句话将整条内容表达出来。这样会给人造成内容枯燥，表达不丰满的感觉。写这部分内容时，学生可以采取陈述句，疑问句结合；简单句，复合句结合的方法。

【范文亮点】

1. 范文采取了定语从句（which will no doubt...）；状语从句（since it is the first time…; so that we can …）； It is + adj. + to do （is it possible for you to pick …）等句式。

2. 文章采用了strengthen；make some preparations；work out；pick up；in advance等高级单词或短语。

3. 文章上下文衔接自然，采用了Besides，Also等连接词，使行文条理清楚。

4. 陈述句、疑问句交叉使用，整篇文章行文灵活自然，不呆板。