Question

【题目】假设你是高二学生李华，你所居住的城市正在争创全国文明城市（National Civilized City），作为一个有责任心的市民，你注意到了两个有待改进的现象，即共享单车（shared bike）随意摆放；行人车辆时有抢道。请你给市长写封信，建议关注这两个问题并提出你的相应整改措施。

注意：开头结尾已给出，不计入总词数。

Dear Mayor,

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Yours Sincerely,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Mayor,

I’m Li Hua, a student in Grade Two. Since our city is struggling for National Civilized City, as a responsible citizen, I think there is something to be improved.

As we can see, shared bikes, increasingly popular in our city, are often parked at random, which damages the image of our city. Besides, the traffic issue is still a hard nut to crack because some drivers and pedestrians usually ignore the traffic rules, thus causing many accidents.

My suggestions are as follows. Firstly, the government should produce stricter rules to regulate the management of bike-sharing system. Secondly, campaigns should be launched to remind the pubic to obey the public rules.

I would appreciate it if you could take my suggestions into serious account.

Yours Sincerely,

Li Hua

【解析】这篇文章是一封信，注意写信的格式。任务中给出的提示信息包含两个内容1. 共享单车（shared bike）随意摆放；2.行人车辆时有抢道。抓住了这亮点，我们就抓住了文章的核心内容。并且一定要提出你的相应整改措施。考虑用一般现在时，第一人称来写。具体来说，写这篇文章时，要注意:1、提示中的内容比较泛泛，需要适当补充；2、为使文章层次清楚，可分三个自然段写：第一自然段总的说明你所居住的城市正在争创全国文明城市；第二自然指出自己发现的两个现象；第三自然段提出自己的建议。这篇文章对于考生的综合能力要求较高，要求考生有很强的谋篇布局的能力和组织要点的能力。需要注意紧扣文章主题，给出的要点都需要包括，缺一不可。写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，一定要契合给出的开头，不能出现文章脱节问题。尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次。

【亮点说明】本篇书面表达要点全面，结构紧凑，是一篇较好的范文。这篇短文使用了大量的短语，为文章增色不少，如: struggle for为……奋斗，at random胡乱。还使用了宾语从句I think there is something to be improved.和定语从句As we can see, shared bikes, increasingly popular in our city, are often parked at random, which damages the image of our city.等多种句式结构，增加了文章的可读性。