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【题目】手机本来是方便联系的，但是很多年轻人却将手机当成消磨时间的娱乐工具。他们整天低头发微信、玩游戏，被人们戏称为“低头族”。请为Campus Life写一篇文章，对这种情况进行分析，并发表你的看法，文章中需包括下面的要点：

1.人们对手机产生依赖，疏远家人和亲友；

2.低头玩手机甚至引发交通事故，给家人带来痛苦。

注意：1.词数120～150；

2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。

3.参考词汇：低头族Smartphone Addicts

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Answer 1

【答案】It is a common sight to see many young people engaged in emailing, twittering or chatting using their smartphones, which might be the best choice to kill time when they are on dull journey.

They are called Smartphone Addicts, who are buried in using their smartphones or laptops without raising their heads. This is very harmful. On the one hand, they keep away from their friends or family. On the other hand, being busy with their smartphones can cause accidents, which brings them more pains than pleasure.

As a matter of fact, they can take up reading to kill the time during their trips. Reading books or newspapers can also enrich their knowledge. The pleasure from reading is a pleasant experience they can't have from using smartphones.

【解析】这是一篇提纲类作文。文章内容要点已经给出。考生在写这篇文章时，要注意以下几点：

1.本篇以现如今“低头族”现象普遍为话题展开论述。通篇应该以一般将来时与现在时态为主。

2. 要点要齐全。阐明观点并指出过度沉溺于手机的危害，同时提出相应的解决方法。但是不要对要点进行简单的罗列。可以使用适当的连接词，使上下文行文流畅，衔接自然流程。

3.根据要点，先组此句；句式丰富，避免单词。

【范文亮点】

文章采用了“On the one hand...on the other hand一方面...另一方面、As a matter of fact实际上”等连接词，使上下文行文流畅，衔接自然流程。

“It is a common sight to see many young people engaged in emailing, twittering or chatting using their smartphones, which might be the best choice to kill time when they are on dull journey.” which引导的非限制性定语从句。

“They are called Smartphone Addicts, who are buried in using their smartphones or laptops without raising their heads”who引导定语从句.

文章中使用了“engage in从事于、keep away from远离...、be busy with忙于...、take up开始 ”