Question

【题目】假定你是学校志愿者团队的学生李华，为维护城市自然环境，五月六日你们班到中山公园参加了环保志愿者活动。请你用日记的形式记叙此事。

内容包括：1.活动内容：捡拾垃圾，分发传单…

2.你对本次活动的感想。

注意：1.词数100左右；

2.日记的开头已为你拟好，不计入总词数。

提示词：传单leaflets

May 6th Saturday Fine

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Answer 1

【答案】May 6th Saturday Fine

Today we took part in a meaningful activity organized by the Voluntary Service Club of our school in order to protect the natural environment of the city. In the morning, we went to Zhongshan Park by bus, talking and laughing all the way. Upon our arrival, we began to work in no time. Some were picking up rubbish while others were collecting the cigarette ends and bottles to throw them into the dustbins. After getting the work done, some of us distributed leaflets to raise the public9 s awareness of the damage littering can cause.

We have learned much from the voluntary experience, which offers us an opportunity to contribute to society better. With the joint efforts, our city will become a more enjoyable place in the near future.

【解析】这是一篇日记，文章内容已经列出，在写作文时应注意以下几点：

1.通篇应用一般过去式。

2.要点应齐全，但不可对要点进行简单罗列，要用适当的连词使全文流畅，衔接自然。

3.注意语气。写作难点在第一条上，应写出活动的详细内容，不可简单罗列并且一定要通过简单的例子来支撑，否则会显得说服力不够，内容不够丰满。这部分可以采取简单句与复合句结合的办法。

【范文亮点】：

采用非限定性定语从句（ We have learned much from the voluntary experience, which offers us an opportunity to contribute to society better）等高级句式。

2采用 In the morning，upon our arrival，after getting the work done等短语，使文章连贯顺畅。

3结尾语气自然，符合日记结尾要求。