Question

人们常说“战胜自己，超越自我”。请你以“I only compete with myself”为题写一篇短文。叙述你生活或学习中的一件事，说明只有战胜了自己，超越了自己才有意义，才是真正意义上的成功。
注意：（1）词数：120左右;
（2）文章题目和开头已给，不计入总词数;
（3）文中不得提及所在学校名称及本人姓名;
I only complete with myself
In the real world, everyone wants to be splendid. Some look for a man of straw(假想的对手) to catch up with, while others just compete with themselves. To me own, I certainly __________
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Answer 1

I only complete with myself
In the real world, everyone wants to be splendid. Some look for a man of straw(假想的对手) to catch up with, while others just compete with themselves. To me own, I certainly stand for the latter.
As a high school student, my dream is to enter a key university. In order to realize it, I once locked on the number one student in our grade as my target object. But the result turned out to be far from satisfactory. Under greater and greater pressure, I just couldn’t concentrate my mind on studies and often made stupid mistakes. I realized I had to make a change. From then on I stopped forcing myself but struggled to the end just to be the best of me. What I required myself to achieve was not to be better than anyone else but to defeat the old one. Since then, I have performed better and made progress day by day.
So it is really useless setting unrealistic goals for ourselves, since there is always someone who is either prettier or smarter than us. We might have kept chasing after others for a lifetime but finally found that we didn’t achieve anything. As the saying goes, “God only saves the man who saves himself.” The person we need to compete with is just ourselves. Life will be surprisingly wonderful as long as we try to be the best of us.

试题分析：考查半开放性作文。半开放性作文给出了一个话题，并有部分的文字提示。给考生自由发挥的余地较大。本文讨论的话题是“战胜自己，超越自我”，按照要求要夹叙夹议，通过自己的亲身经历进行阐述只有战胜了自己，超越了自己才有意义，才是真正意义上的成功。，要求考生在保证内容要点全部概括的基础上可以充分发挥自己的想象，进而用自己的语言来表达某种观点或看法，增添了写作的灵活性，同时能较好地考查考生的想象能力和英语语言表达能力。同时也要选择合适的连接词，把各个要点组织成一个完整的整体，如besides, further, last but not least等。高考英语作文已经不再仅仅考察学生的议论能力，它有些借鉴中文作文，要求学生夹叙夹议。在叙述中，如果只是平铺直叙那显然得不到高分。描写的关键在于捕捉事物的特征，而高考作文往往要求学生在短短几句话中描写到位，这其实是不低的要求。
【亮点说明】这篇范文用了一些常用的短语：如：far from satisfactory， struggle to the end，make progress，day by day，chase after，compete with 等，还有句式也多变，如：As a high school student, my dream is to enter a key university.这句话用了不定式做表语， In order to realize it, I once locked on the number one student in our grade as my target object. 这句话用不定式做目的状语， What I required myself to achieve was not to be better than anyone else but to defeat the old one.这句话用了主语从句，    So it is really useless setting unrealistic goals for ourselves, since there is always someone who is either prettier or smarter than us. 这句话用it做形式主语和定语从句，We might have kept others for a lifetime but finally found that we didn’t achieve anything. As the saying goes, “God only saves the man who saves himself.” 这句话用了非限制性定语从句， Life will be surprisingly wonderful as long as we try to be the best of us.这句话用了as long as引导条件状语从句。