Question

阅读下面的短文，然后按照要求写一篇150词左右的英语短文。
More than five years I was working at a little clinic after I graduated from college. Actually I didn’t like the job and felt depressed every day. One day while working at the cash register, an elderly couple came in with a little girl in a wheelchair.
As I looked closer at this girl, I realized that she was disabled. I then realized she had no arms or legs, just a head, neck and torso. She was in red. That is a warm color.
As I took the money from her grandparent, I looked down at the girl, who was giving me the cutest, largest smile I have ever seen. All of a sudden her handicap was gone and all I saw was this beautiful girl, and her smile, just like the warm sun in the winter melted me and almost instantly gave me a completely new sense of what life is all about.
It was her smile that took me from a poor, unhappy college student and brought me into her world; a world of smiles, love and warmth.
Now I’m a successful business person and whenever I get down and think about the troubles of the world, I think about that little girl and the remarkable lesson about life that she taught me.
【写作内容】
1．以约30个词概括这篇短文的内容要点。
然后以约120词就“生活态度”这一话题发表你的看法，内容包括：
上述故事给你的感受与启发；
举例说明你生活中遇到过让你改变生活态度的人或事；
你认为生活态度对我们的生活有何重要意义。
【写作要求】
1．可以使用实例来支持你的论点，也可以参照阅读材料的内容，但不得直接引用原文中的句子；
2．作文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称。
【评分标准】
概括准确，语言规范，内容合适，语篇连贯。

Answer 1

The writer encountered a little disabled girl when he was working as a cashier in a clinic. The girl’s smile taught the writer a profound lesson, and inspired him to become successful.
After reading the story, I was deeply touched too. I’m in favor of the idea that when you smile to the world, the world will smile back to you. The story reminds me of my friend Joe, who used to complain a lot when he came across any kind of difficulty or whenever something unpleasant happened to him. Later, Joe’s classmate sitting next to him in Senior Grade One helped him to change greatly. The classmate was born in a very poor family, but instead of complaining, he always smiled to everybody around and devoted himself to his studies. Ever since he met his deskmate, more and more smiles appeared on Joe’s face and soon he even made greater progress in his studies.
In a word, attitude is everything. Only when we take a correct attitude toward life can we enjoy a better, more meaningful and more beautiful life.

试题分析：本文属于读写任务写作，动笔前，一定要认真阅读原文，并理解内容。认真看清题目要求，这篇书面表达给了一段材料：先要求以约30个词概括上文的主要内容，要求有很高的概括提炼的能力，要抓住文章的主题，再以约120个词写一篇短文，按照要点去表达，不能有遗漏，写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系。写作时尽量使用自己会的单词、词组和句型，同时也要注意使用一些高级语法和句型，使自己的文章更有文采。
【亮点说明】文章简洁的总结了所给材料，语言规范，内容合适，语篇连贯，使用了词组：work as担当， in favor of 支持，赞同，instead of 代替，devoted himself to 致力于，In a word总之，和句型：The story reminds me of my friend Joe, who used to complain a lot when he came across any kind of difficulty or whenever something unpleasant happened to him. 这句话用了定语从句和让步状语从句，Later, Joe’s classmate sitting next to him in Senior Grade One helped him to change greatly.这句话用了现在分词做定语，Only when we take a correct attitude toward life can we enjoy a better, more meaningful and more beautiful life.这句话用了倒装句。