Question

12．假如你是普宁市勤建中学学生李华，你的美国笔友约翰来信询问雅安地震情况，并表达了要去灾区当志愿者的愿望．请你回信，内容主要包括：
1．伤亡情况：死约200人，伤逾万人．
2．救援人员：军队，当地政府及民众．
3．婉言劝止并说明理由．
注意：1．词数100左右．
2．可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯．
3．相关词汇：rescue 救援   the trapped 被困人员
Dear John，
Thank you very much for your concern over the earthquake in Ya'an，Sichuan Province．
                                                                            
                                                           Yours
                                                           Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 考查应用文中的书信的写作．你的美国笔友约翰来信询问雅安地震情况，并表达了要去灾区当志愿者的愿望．请你回信．要点都已经给出，审题时注意本文使用一般过去时和一般现在时，描述要尽量选择简洁的语言，运用合适的语法规则和词汇把各要点都准确表述出．难点在于选择词汇和句型，可以灵活运用高级词汇和固定短语准确表述．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：范文的I don't think it's a good idea for you to come．和 you will find it hard to communicate with people there，都使用了it，还要用适当的连接词被句子连接起来，象As far as I know，after all，besides等词，这样文章显得更连贯． 
As far as I know，about two hundred people were killed and more than ten thousand injured in the earthquake．（高分句型一）
Together with the local people，they are making every effort to search for the trapped and send the injured to hospitals．（高分句型二）

解答 Dear John，
       Thank you very muncern over the earthquake in Ya'an，Sichuan Province．Now I'm writing to tell you something about it．
       As far as I know，about two hundred people were killed and more than ten thousand injured in the earthquake．（高分句型一） The army was soon sent to join the local government in the rescue．Together with the local people，they are making every effort to search for the trapped and send the injured to hospitals．（高分句型二）    
       I know you are dying to help out．But personally，I don't think it's a good idea for you to come．You know，danger still exists．Besides，you will find it hard to communicate with people there．After all，you speak a different language．
       Anyway，thank you for your offer and I will keep you informed of the situation．
                                                                                                                                                                                                    Yours，
                                                                                                                                                                                                    Li Hua．

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．