Question

请根据以下提示，并结合生活中的事例，用英语写一篇短文。
Encouragement from a friend plays a very important role in motivating you to solve the problems you are facing. It helps you fight the difficulties and get out of an unfavorable situation you are stuck in.
注意：
无须写标题，文章开头已经给出；
除诗歌外，文体不限；
文中不得透露个人姓名和学校名称；
词数不少于120。
Encouragement can serve as a ray of hope during difficult times.

Answer 1

One possible version：
Encouragements can serve as a ray of hope during difficult times. The best ones to encourage a depressed soul are our friends.
It was three years age when I just began to attend High School. For the first time I failed in an English exam which I had thought I was best at. I felt very depressed. My best friend, Lily, tried to comfort me, offering her emotional support. She listened to me carefully and told me Edison succeeded in inventing the electric bulb after failing more than 300 times. Eventually, with her patient encouragement, I overcome depress and was determined to try hard again. In the next exam, I did it.
Encouragement is the best means to help someone feel better. It can give the courage to fight difficulties and motivate someone to move on.

解析试题分析：根据提示判断本文属于话题作文。通过提示语Encouragement can serve as a ray of hope during difficult times.可总结出命题者让学生写的话题即encouragement鼓励。在谈到“encouragement”的时候，同学们很容易联想到“friend”。这样“结合生活中的实际事例”这一要求就很容易达到，第二段的构思难度较小。然而，正因为encouragement这一话题贴近生活，写作难度小，文章写作就更考验学生的写作功底。故在文章的构词，层次安排和选词搭配上要仔细斟酌。
【亮点说明】
本篇范文结构简单，层次十分清晰，给阅卷老师一种干脆利落的感觉。文章结构为传统的三段式，第一段开篇点题，The best ones to encourage a depressed soul are our friends.点明本文的写作内容为来自朋友的鼓励。第二段紧扣第一段的内容，详细描述了朋友在“我”考试失利后给予鼓励的事情。并在描述事例的过程中引用Edison succeeded in inventing the electric bulb after failing more than 300 times的故事，增强了事例的可读性。第三段用两句话简单总结上文，并进一步深化主题。此外，文章灵活使用各种句型如定语从句I failed in an English exam which I had thought I was best at，同位语和插入语My best friend, Lily, tried to comfort me, offering her emotional support等。文章中长短句结合，也显示了作者深厚的作文功底。