Question

【题目】假定你是李华，你校学生会于2018年1月5日下午举行了“校园义卖”活动。请你用英语写封信给你的美国笔友Peter, 告诉他此次活动的有关情况，内容包括：

1.活动目的

2. 具体内容

3. 谈谈你的感想、收获和体会。

注意：1.文章开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。

2.词数： 100左右；可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。

参考词汇：校园义卖：Charity Sales in campus

Dear Peter,

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Yours,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Peter,

Our Students’ Union held a Charity Sales on the afternoon of Jan. 5th,2018 to raise money for the needy children in the poverty-stricken areas. These efforts are made to support these poor children to continue their education or improve their living.

Second-hand or unnecessary items were collected in each class before the Charity Sales. When it came to selling goods, a long line of desks were put up in the playground with a wide range of goods waiting for their potential customers. But what amazed me most is that fresh food such as sandwiches, juice were made by students on the spot. If you were here, you would be impressed by the yelling sellers, the bargaining buyer, and the happy money-collectors.

The activity is welcomed by all. For one thing, our social skills get improved and practiced. For another, offering help for others made us happy.

Best wishes！

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】此文为提纲式作文，文章主要是介绍校园活动情况。

写作的主要步骤为：第一步： 确定文章的要点：1. 活动目的，活动时间，活动地点。2. 活动的具体内容，3.活动的收获，感想和体会。

第二步，确定时态，语态，人称，任臣为第一人称，时态为过去时。

第三步：起草文章，文章可大体分为三段，第一段写信的背景， 第二段介绍活动 第三段谈谈感受，体会。

亮点分析：

使用被动语态，使表达高级。These efforts are made to support these poor children to continue their education or improve their living.

Second-hand or unnecessary items were collected in each class before the Charity Sales.

When it came to selling goods, a long line of desks were put up in the playground with a wide range of goods waiting for their potential customers.

使用主语从句使句式简洁。But what amazed me most is that fresh food such as sandwiches, juice were made by students on the spot.

使用虚拟语气，If you were here, you would be impressed by the yelling sellers, the bargaining buyer, and the happy money-collectors.

文章巧妙使用连接词。如：when it comes to, for one thing, for another 等。