Question

1．假如你是新华中学的学生李华，你的美国朋友Tom一周前给你发电子邮件，询问你暑假里的打算，但你因准备期末考试未能及时回复．请根据以下要点给他回封邮件：
（1）未及时回信的原因；
（2）你假期的打算（如做兼职、旅行、做志愿者等）
注意：
1．词数：120-150；
2．可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯．

Answer 1

分析 本文是一篇提纲作文．根据所提供的材料信息，给美国朋友Tom写一封邮件，对他一周前给你发电子邮件未能及时回复说明原因及告知他自己的暑假打算．
写作时人称以第一和第三人称为主，时态以一般现在时和一般过去时为主．
写作要点：1．做家务的理由； 2．做家务的过程；3．你的感受．
重要短语：feel sorry for（收到…来信），be unable to do（不能做某事），feel sorry for（对…感到抱歉），reply one's letter （回答某人的信），in time （及时），attach great importance to…（认为…重要），take hold of（抓住），focus on（集中于…），forgive sb for sth（因某人宽恕某人），ask sb for sth（向某人要某物），intend to do sth（打算做某事），work as（作为，充当），promise sb sth（承诺某人某物），broaden one's horizon（拓宽某人的眼界），enrich one's life （丰富某人的生活），the picturesque scenery（优美如画的风景），make full use of（充分利用），devote one's passion to（激情地投入），exchange sth with sb（与某人交换某事）．
【高分句型一】
1．The final exam，which all of us attached great importance to，took hold of my whole spare time．
此处是由关系代词"which"引导的非限制性定语从句，主句为"The final exam took hold of my whole spare time"，关系代词"which"在从句中作主语，指代前面整个主句的内容．
【高分句型二】
2．I had no choice but to completely focus on my study．
此处是由固定句型"I have no choice but to do sth"意为"某人别无选择，只有做某事"．
【高分句型三】
3．I do appreciate it if you could understand and forgive me for my impoliteness．
此处是由"it"作形式宾语，"if"引导的从句作正在的宾语，结构为"I appreciate/enjoy/like/love/hate+it+if/when引导的从句"．
【高分句型四】
3．I intend to take a part-time job working as an assistant teacher in a certain school，which I believe will promise me a good opportunity to enhance interpersonal skills，broaden our horizon and enrich our life．
此处是由关系代词"which"引导的非限制性定语从句，主句为"I intend to take a part-time job working as an assistant teacher in a certain school"，关系代词"which"在从句中作主语，指代前面整个主句的内容．

解答 Dear Tom，
How is everything going？I feel terribly sorry for being unable to reply your last letter in time．The final exam，which all of us attached great importance to，took hold of my whole spare time．【高分句型一】Therefore，I had no choice but to completely focus on my study．【高分句型二】I do appreciate it if you could understand and forgive me for my impoliteness．【高分句型三】（做家务的过程）
You asked me for my summer vacation arrangement in your last letter．Here lists my primary plan．To start with，I intend to take a part-time job working as an assistant teacher in a certain school，which I believe will promise me a good opportunity to enhance interpersonal skills，broaden our horizon and enrich our life．【高分句型四】Moreover，I consider it a golden chance to tour around China to enjoy the picturesque scenery and taste the inviting food here and there．Last but not least，being a social volunteer has long been my dream and I could make full use of the time to devote my passion to the society and help those in need during the long vacation．（做家务的过程）
Sorry indeed for having made you wait for such a long time．By the way，should you have any better plan，would you please write back to exchange ideas with me？（总结）
Looking forward to your reply．
Yours
LiHua

点评 提纲作文在写作时要注意内容是否包含了所有要点．写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次，平时需注意积累短语和重要句型．