Question

6．目前，中小学生过度使用手机或者电脑等电子产品，这对他们的身体造成了很大危害．谈谈你的想法并提出建议．要点如下：
    1．过度使用电子产品对身体有害；
    2．学生应该以学习为主，同时要多参加各种有益活动等；
    3．…．
    注意：
    1、词数100左右；
    2、可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；
    3、开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词汇．
    参考词汇：electronics（电子产品）
    As we know，cell phones and computers are common in our daily life．__________________

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于提纲类作文，根据提示信息就中小学生过度使用手机或者电脑等电子产品，对身体造成了很大危害．谈谈你的想法并提出建议，写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，明确几个要点：过度使用电子产品对身体有害；学生应该以学习为主，同时要多参加各种有益活动等；个人见解 2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态；就本文而言应该用一般现在时态．4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：However，some students spend too much time on them，which，in turn does great harm to their health especially to their eyes．句中使用非限制性定语从句；
  In my personal view，the major task for students is to learn knowledge with various approaches，for which healthy body and mind is the base．句中使用介词+which引导的非限制性定语从句；
Taking part in some rewarding activities like being volunteers to help the old is another good choice．句中使用动名词作主语

解答 As we know，cell phones and computers are common in our daily life．They have brought us much convenience．However，some students spend too much time on them，which，in turn does great harm to their health especially to their eyes．（高分句型一）
     In my personal view，the major task for students is to learn knowledge with various approaches，for which healthy body and mind is the base．（高分句型二）Therefore，they should focus more attention on their lessons and be less dependent on electronics．They should also make the best of their spare time to take sports，such as soccer，basketball，running and so on．Taking part in some rewarding activities like being volunteers to help the old is another good choice．（高分句型三）Besides，such interaction as talking or chatting with friends and classmates can reduce the dependence on the electronics psychologically．

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．