Question

【题目】假定你是李华，前不久利用国庆假期与家人外出游玩并入住某国际连锁酒店。下面是酒店的经理Mr.Wayne在最近给你发来征求反馈意见的电子邮件。请根据以下要点写一封回邮：

1.对本次酒店入住体验表示肯定；

2.酒店的免费WiFi只在公共区域提供，而房间WiFi收费过高，希望改进；

3.祝愿酒店越办越好。

Dear Li Hua,

Thank you for your recent stay at Hotel Westin,where you spent your holiday from Oct 1st to Oct 3rd.We would greatly appreciate it if you would take the time to give some feelback on your stay,which will help us to improve our service.

Do you like the facilities of the hotel?

Do you enjoy the food of the hotel restaurant?

Are you satisfied with the service of the hotel staff?

Any other advice?

Thank you for your time.We look forward to welcoming you back to Westin in the near future.

Sincerely,

Bruce Wayne.

洼意：

1.词数100左右；

2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；

3.邮件开头和结尾已为你写好，不计入词数。

Dear Mr.Wayne,

Thank you for your E-mail and I am glad to give feedback on my recent stay at HotelWestin.

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Yours faithfully,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Mr.Wayne,

Thank you for your E-mail and I am glad to give feedback on my recent stay at Hotel Merry Time.

There is no denying that my 3-day stay at your hotel has been the most memorable time in my holidays. Featuring modern facilities and stylish decoration,Westin guaranteed my families comfort and relaxation. Furthermore,we enjoyed the tasteful dishes of the hotel restaurant where various cuisines are served.Of all the advantages,the most impressive is the helpful staff.It was your hospitality and consideration on everyday basis that made me feel at home.

However,there is room for improvement as for the WiFi service,since the free WiFi access is only available in public area and the paid WiFi service in guest room is overcharged.

I hope my feedback would be of great help to your better service and business.

Yours faithfully,

Li Hua

【解析】这是一篇书信类作文。试题是主人公李华给一家国际连锁酒店回复的电子邮件，回复动笔前，首先要仔细审题：审要求，审文体，审时态，审人称。其次。抓中心，列重点。写作时要，紧扣要点。同时，尽可能使句子的表达形式多样化，提高书面表达的档次和可读性。

【范文亮点】

1. 要点齐全，结构完整，行文流畅。文中使用了大量短语使用多种句式。例如：定语从句：where various cuisines are served；原因状语since free WiFi access is only available in public area； 强调句It was your hospitality and consideration on everyday basis that. 动名词作主语Speaking and listening are veryimportant等等。

2. 文中使用了非常好的连接词，使文章层次清晰，观点分明，如：Undoubtedly,； However, I hope等等。