Question

【题目】假设你是红星中学高三（1）班的学生李华，针对校园内一些不文明现象，你班开展了主题活动，请根据以下四幅图的先后顺序，为校刊“英语园地”写一篇短文，记述你和同学参与活动的全过程。

注意：1. 词数不少于60；

2. 短文的开头已给出，不计入总词数。

Recently, I noticed something unpleasent in our school.

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Answer 1

【答案】

Dear Chris,

I’m writing to apply to be a web editor, which I saw advertised on our school website. I would like to work for you because I care a lot about current affairs and take great interest in journalism. I think I can do the job well due to my language skills. I’m good at English. Once I got the first prize in the English Writing Competition in our school. In addition, I worked as a reporter for our school newspaper last year, which will surely help me do the job better.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours sincerely,

Li Hua

【解析】

试题分析：本篇书面表达是一篇图片作文。图画作文写作的时候注意以下几点：1、仔细审图并且注意有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，明确有哪些要点。2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲范围内进行分析、构思和想象。要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写。3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态；语言表达要符合英语习惯。4.注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点。

【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，语言简洁明了，而且使用了多种句式和结构。比如because I care a lot about current affairs and take great interest in journalism.是状语从句。which I saw advertised on our school website.是非限制性定语从句，此外，文章还使用了In addition等关联词使文章内容更具有层次感，也使内容更加连贯。