Question

【题目】假如你是新华中学的学生李华，你的美国朋友Tom借给你的一本书你不慎丢失了。请你根据以下要点给他写一封道歉信：

表达歉意；2. 丢失过程； 3.补救措施。

注意： 1. 词数120左右

2. 可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。

Dear Tom,

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Yours,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】

Dear Sir or Madam,

I heartedly want to be a volunteer of yours. Here is something about me.

I am a student who will graduate from senior high school. I always regard my class as our family and sacrifice my personal interests whenever necessary. Besides taking an active part in class activities, I work responsibly to build up a good reputation for the team. I respect all the people around me and I’m always willing to give a hand to those in need. I’m strict with myself, making every effort to achieve an all-round development. In time of difficulty, I always keep strong-minded.

In addition, I have a good command of English both in speaking and writing. I was in an America host family for 20 days in a summer camp, which helps me to know how to get along well with foreigners.

Looking forward to your early reply.

Sincerely yours,

Li Hua

【解析】

试题分析：本文是篇邮件应用文，内容提示较简洁，只是框架，但学生容易把握写作要求和写作目的。考生在写作之前必修认真审题，首先要注意文章的时态，用一般现在时和将来时。人称用第一和第二人称。根据写作要求文章分三段来写。第一段首先对不能及时回复邮件表示歉意并表明原因，之后提出自己的打算。第二段重点描述自己的具体计划和想法。第三段总结全文。再有就是不能根据材料逐字逐句的翻译应该注意句子的衔接，以提高作文的档次。

【亮点说明】文章要点齐全，表达思路明确，知识点运用恰当到位，文中使用了非常好的短语和句子为文章增色不少，比如in time, prefer to go travelling, cultural background, broaden one’s horizon, enrich one’s knowledge等。还运用了现在完成进行时since I have been preparing for the final exam recently；to do做目的状语not only to enjoy the delicious food, but to learn about people from a different cultural background；定语从句where I can appreciate the creations of nature and relax myself；which should not be missed to broaden my horizon as well as enriching my knowledge.等等。并注意了句子的衔接如：first, second, finally, all in all等。