Question

【题目】假如你是李华，在伦敦做交换生，昨天你的室友Tony在校园摔倒后住院。请给校求助中心写封邮件，寻找帮助Tony的中国学生。

注意：1.词数100左右

2. 可适当增加细节，以使行文流畅。

3. 邮件的开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。

DearSir/Madam,

_________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

Yours,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Sir/madam,

I am Li Hua, an exchange student from China. I am writing to ask you to look for a Chinese student.

Yesterday, my roommate Tony was on the way to the classroom when he fell down and could hardly move. Just at that moment, a Chinese girl came to him. She gave him first aid and called an ambulance. Thanks to the kind girl, Tony was sent to hospital in time. But the girl left quietly before Tony could express his thanks. The girl is about 18 years old and of medium height with short hair. Tony is eager to meet her to express his sincere thanks. Could you please help find her?

Looking forwards to your reply.

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】试题分析：本文是半开放式作文。你是在伦敦做交换生的李华，昨天你的室友Tony在校园摔倒后住院。要求你给校求助中心写封邮件，寻找帮助Tony的中国学生。写作时不要逐句翻译，可适当增加细节以使行文连贯同时要把所提示的点写全，语句通顺，同时要注意准确运用时态、语态、上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系。根据句意适当使用并列连词，同时也要合理运用高级词汇和高级句子为文章增色添彩。注意：1.词数100左右2.邮件的开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。

【亮点说明】

本文是一篇电子邮件，文章格式正确，内容齐全，布局合理，使用高级句子。I am Li Hua, an exchange student from China.句子看似简单却，其实用了同位语；Yesterday, my roommate Tony was on the way to the classroom when he fell down固定句式，when的特殊用法；Tony was sent to hospital in time.使用一般过去时态的被动语态，显得句子丰富多彩；the girl left quietly before Tony could express his thanks. Before引导时间状语从句；Could you please help find her?问句的运用别具一格；另外，Just at that moment, Thanks to the kind girl, But等的使用，为文章增色添彩。