Question

16．你的美国笔友Tom来信和你讨论个人信息保护问题，让你就如何保护个人信息给他一些建议．请你以李华的名义重点从以下两个方面谈谈自己的看法：
1、给予足够重视；
2、学会如何保护．
注意：
1、词数120左右；
2、文章开头已经写好，但不计人总词数．
Dear Tom．
We are living in the Information Age．                                                  
Yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于提纲类作文，根据提示信息美国笔友Tom来信和你讨论个人信息保护问题，让你就如何保护个人信息给他一些建议．请你以李华的名义重点从以下两个方面谈谈自己的看法，写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，明确几个要点：分别给予足够重视和学会如何保护两个方面来讨论该话题 2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态；就本文而言应该用一般现在时态．4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：First of all首先；Secondly其次；For example比如；pay  attention to注意；If necessary如果必要的话；
Remember：once you've shared something，you will lose control of it and some people may share upsetting things about you without you knowing it．（高分句型一）
If you receive an officiallooking email that asks you to send your financial details，you should never reply as you could become a victim of identity fraud．（高分句型二）

解答 Dear Tom，
        We are living in the Information Age．The protection of personal information is becoming more and more important．Here I'd like to give you some advice on this．
         First of all，you should pay enough attention to the protection of your personal information．Remember：once you've shared something，you will lose control of it and some people may share upsetting things about you without you knowing it．（高分句型一）
        Secondly，you must know how to protect your personal information．For example，never provide your personal information for any strangers or people you know online．If necessary，you'd better confirm it is for legal use before letting it out．If you receive an officiallooking email that asks you to send your financial details，you should never reply as you could become a victim of identity fraud．（高分句型二）
                                                                                                                                                                                                           Yours，
                                                                                                                                                                                                             Li Hua

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．