Question

【题目】假设你是李华，星期天你要和你的同班同学李明一起去敬老院参加义务劳动，你去找他，但他没有在家 ，你给他留言说明要求，内容如下：

(1)9：30在学校门口集合;

(2)带劳动工具(洗衣粉、理发工具、除草工具等);

(3)自带午饭，骑自行车前往。

注意：

(1)词数100左右;

(2)可以适当增加细节，以使行文 连贯。

Dear Li Ming，

___________________________________________________________

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Answer 1

【答案】

Dear Li Ming,

This Sunday we'll go to the nursing home and do some voluntary labor. You were out, when I dropped in on you. Therefore, I had to leave a message to you. According to what monitor said, we'll meet at the gate of our school at 9:30 tomorrow morning and start out together by bike. So you should take your bike and don't forget to take some washing powder, barber tools and weeding tools so that we can help them with washing clothes, cutting their hair and get rid of some weed in the garden. At last, you should remember to take some food for lunch because we'll stay there for chatting with them at noon. If you come back, you'll phone me at once.

【解析】

本文属于提纲式要点作文，要求学生就所给内容写一张留言条，这是学生比较熟悉的题材，体现了英语学习应该注意实用性，生活化的原则。在写作时应注意下面几点： (1)注意人称，应该用第一人称的形式给同学李华(第二人称)写便条：(2)注意时态的正确使用：从试题的内容上可以看出在表达要点上应用将来时;(3)注意恰当使用连接词，使各个要点间语言连贯，行文通顺。但是注意提纲类书面表达不是简单的逐条翻译，而是将所给的几个要点合理的组成比较通顺的语句，因此要仔细组织语言，合理安排结构。在语言方面，要特别注意简洁明了，开门见山提出主题。

【亮点说明】本篇书面表达要点全面，语言简练流畅、格式正确。文章开篇提出写留言的目的和原因，然后叙述主要内容，用according to、so和at last等连词和短语引出了文章的三个要点，使文章更具有层次感。此外还运用了目的状语从句so that we can help them with washing clothes, cutting their hair and get rid of some weed in the garden原因状语从句because we’ll stay there for chatting with them at noon和条件状语从句If you come back, because we’ll stay there for chatting with them at noon. If you come back, 把要求和目的有机联系起来，使文章结构更为紧凑。