Question

19．假如你是李华．你的朋友Tommy是一个手机低头族，无论站着、坐着、走着，他都在低头玩手机．请就此给Tommy写一封信．
内容包括：
1．做手机低头族的危害（过度使用手机会导致眼睛疾病或带来其他健康问题，给自身安全带来隐患）；
2．希望他改掉这个坏习惯．
注意：
1．词数100左右；
2．可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；
3．开头语和结尾语已给出，不计入总词数．
参考词汇：过度使用overuse
Dear Tommy，
There seems to be a trend that people now tend to play with their cell phones no matter where they are．And I know you are not an exception．
There is no doubt that cell phones play an important part in our daily life．（高分句型一）However，being addicted to cell phones does a lot of harm to the owners．First，staring at a cell phone screen for hours on end can lead to dry eyes or other eye diseases．Second，if you always overuse your cell phone，your hands as well as your neck will ache，which will have a bad effect on you．（高分句型二）Besides，on your way home or to school，with your attention fully focused on the cell phone，perhaps you will fail to notice the traffic around you，which will be a great danger to you．（高分句型三）
Therefore，I sincerely expect you to give up your bad habit and use your cell phone wisely．
Yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于提纲类作文，根据提示信息假如你是李华．你的朋友Tommy是一个手机低头族，无论站着、坐着、走着，他都在低头玩手机．请就此给Tommy写一封信．写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，明确几个要点：做手机低头族的危害（过度使用手机会导致眼睛疾病或带来其他健康问题，给自身安全带来隐患）；希望他改掉这个坏习惯．2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态．4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：tend to 倾向于；There is no doubt that…毫无疑问；play an important part in 在…方面起重要作用；Besides另外；Therefore因此；give up放弃；
There is no doubt that cell phones play an important part in our daily life．（高分句型一）
Second，if you always overuse your cell phone，your hands as well as your neck will ache，which will have a bad effect on you．（高分句型二）
Besides，on your way home or to school，with your attention fully focused on the cell phone，perhaps you will fail to notice the traffic around you，which will be a great danger to you．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear Tommy，
      There seems to be a trend that people now tend to play with their cell phones no matter where they are．And I know you are not an exception．
      There is no doubt that cell phones play an important part in our daily life．（高分句型一）However，being addicted to cell phones does a lot of harm to the owners．First，staring at a cell phone screen for hours on end can lead to dry eyes or other eye diseases．Second，if you always overuse your cell phone，your hands as well as your neck will ache，which will have a bad effect on you．（高分句型二）Besides，on your way home or to school，with your attention fully focused on the cell phone，perhaps you will fail to notice the traffic around you，which will be a great danger to you．（高分句型三）
      Therefore，I sincerely expect you to give up your bad habit and use your cell phone wisely．
                                                                                                                                                                                                         Yours，
                                                                                                                                                                                                         Li Hua

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．