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2．假如你是李华，是一名高中生．随着科技的发展，iPad已成为中学生的新宠．用iPad既可以听音乐，阅读纯文本电子书，又可玩电子游戏．请你用英语给某英语报社写一封信，谈谈中学生使用iPad的情况．信的内容必须包括以下几点：
1、使 用iPad对学习的好处，
2、对课堂纪律和学习可能产生的负面影响，
3、提出自己的建议并说明理由．
注意：开头已经给出，不计入总数．词数120字左右
Dear Editor'，
I'm a senior high school student named Li Hua．Now many students have iPads and think it's a fashion to use them．                                             

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于提纲类作文   本文同时还属于议论文，要求考生以李华的身份给某英语报社写一封信，谈谈学使用iPad的情况．所以本文使用第三人称和一般现在时．要点：1．使用iPad的好处：可以听音乐放松，下载有用的学习资料，对英语学习尤其有效．2．负面影响：有学生听音乐时，对其他同学的学习产生不好影响．有学生在教室里使用iPad玩游戏，不但浪费了时间而且成绩还急剧下降．过多使用iPad还影响视力．3．个人建议和理由：应该好好利用iPad有利的一面，要学习下载的有用的学习材料．建议学生对于iPad的使用时间要适当控制．建议文章分成三段，三个要点各成一段．写作时注意技巧的运用，尤其要尽量使用高级词汇及句式以增加文章的层次．
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本篇范文结构合理，用词地道流畅．上下文承转自然，无中国式英语，时态和人称使用准确无误．文章中句式多样，既有陈述句，也有祈使句．使用了较多的高级句式，如定语从句…which makes the teacher and other students greatly annoyed．分词做状语Using an iPad，we can listen to music，download a lot of learning materials and read them on the screen．同时文章中高级词汇使用也较多，如apparently，achieve academic success等；范文中还使用了较多的串联才，如in my opinion，furthermore等．
Using an iPad，we can listen to music，download a lot of learning materials and read them on the screen．（高分句型一）
Some students，however，bring their iPads to the classroom and listen to music without earphones，which makes the teacher and other students greatly annoyed．（高分句型二）
The classroom is a place for students to study，and therefore concentration is awfully needed for us to learn our lessons．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear Editor，
      I'm a senior high school student named Li Hua．Now many students have iPads and think it's a fashion to use them．Using an iPad，we can listen to music，download a lot of learning materials and read them on the screen．（高分句型一）Apparently，it's helpful to our study，especially to our English listening．
      Some students，however，bring their iPads to the classroom and listen to music without earphones，which makes the teacher and other students greatly annoyed．（高分句型二）Some of them even waste precious time in class playing video games．
      In my opinion，as students，we should make good use of iPads to help achieve academic success．The classroom is a place for students to study，and therefore concentration is awfully needed for us to learn our lessons．（高分句型三）Furthermore，the school should make a rule to guide the students to use iPads in a proper way．
                                                                                                                                                                                                                        Yours sincerely，
                                                                                                                                                                                                                                Li Hua

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．