Question

4．假定你校将举行一个成人仪式，你将作为代表在仪式上发言，请你按以下内容要点准备一篇英文发言稿．
（1）过去对成年的向往：
（2）现在的感受和认识；
（3）将来的目标及措施．
注意：
（1）词数100左右
（2）文中不能出现本人相关信息．
（3）可以适当增加细节，使行文连贯．
（4）发言稿的开头与结束语已为你写好，不计入总词数．
Good morning，everyone!
The topic of my speech today is"Thoughts on becoming a grown-up"．
As a child，I always hoped that I could grow up as soon as possible so that I could have whatever I wanted and do whatever I liked．【高分句型】（过去对成年的向往）Now I'm a grown-up，but I find things do not go as I expected．（现在的感受）Although I can enjoy more freedom，at the same time I realize that being a grown-up not only means this，but also more responsibilities．【高分句型】（现在的认识）I hope to do more for my parents and society in the future to make my life more meaningful．（将来的目标）To reach the goal，I must first try my best to pass the college entrance examination and enter a good university．（要采取的措施）
Thank you for your listening．

Answer 1

分析 本作文为应用文，根据所给要点内容写一篇在校成人仪式上的发言稿，属于提纲作文．时态为一般过去时和一般现在时．人称以第一人称为主．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：重要短语：grow up （成长），not only …，but also（不但…而且），reach the goal （实现目标…），try one's best…（努力做），enter a good university（上好大学）．
As a child，I always hoped that I could grow up as soon as possible so that I could have whatever I wanted and do whatever I liked．【高分句型】
Although I can enjoy more freedom，at the same time I realize that being a grown-up not only means this，but also more responsibilities．【高分句型】

解答 Good morning，everyone!
    The topic of my speech today is"Thoughts on becoming a grown-up．"
    As a child，I always hoped that I could grow up as soon as possible so that I could have whatever I wanted and do whatever I liked．【高分句型】（过去对成年的向往）Now I'm a grown-up，but I find things do not go as I expected．（现在的感受）Although I can enjoy more freedom，at the same time I realize that being a grown-up not only means this，but also more responsibilities．【高分句型】（现在的认识）I hope to do more for my parents and society in the future to make my life more meaningful．（将来的目标）To reach the goal，I must first try my best to pass the college entrance examination and enter a good university．（要采取的措施）
    Thank you for your listening．

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．