Question

4．假定你是李华．请根据写作要点用英语写一篇周记，记述你周末帮助家人做家务的一次经历．
写作要点：（1）做家务的理由；（2）做家务的过程；（3）你的感受．
注意：
（1）短文词数不少于100；
（2）开头部分已写好，不计入总词数；
（3）不能使用真实姓名和学校名称．
I am an 18-year-old middle school student，I have been busy with my study and seldom helped my parents with the housework．Feeling quite sorry for that，I begin to think about what to do to help．
Last Sunday，when my parents went out shopping，I suddenly got an idea：why not give the rooms a thorough cleaning？Firstly I collected all the books，newspapers and other things scattered in the rooms and put them in place．Then I wiped the dust off all the furniture．After that，I swept and mopped the floors．
At this very moment，my parents came back and were quite surprised to see all the rooms tidy and floors shinning．My mother gave me a hug and I could see satisfaction in her eyes．Tired as I was，I never felt so happy．．

Answer 1

分析 本文是一篇提纲作文．根据所提供的材料信息，写一篇周记，记述周末帮助家人做家务的一次经历．
写作时人称以第一和第三人称为主，时态以一般现在时和一般过去时为主．
写作要点：1．做家务的理由； 2．做家务的过程；3．你的感受．
重要短语：be busy with（收到…来信），help sb with sth（帮助某人做某事），be sorry for（对…感到抱歉），think about（考虑…），go out shopping（外出购物），get an idea（想出了一个主意），why not（为什么不…），a thorough cleaning（一个彻底的清扫），put sth in place（把某物放在恰当的位置），wiped sth off（擦去某物），mop the floors（拖到），be surprised to do （惊奇地做某事），give sb a hug（拥抱某人）．
【高分句型一】
1．Feeling quite sorry for that，I begin to think about what to do to help．
此处是由现在分词短语作原因状语，主句为"I begin to think about what to do to help"，主句的主语为"I"与所给动词"feel"构成逻辑上的主动关系．
【高分句型二】
2．Firstly I collected all the books，newspapers and other things scattered in the rooms and put them in place．
此处是由过去分词"scattered+介词短语"作后置定语，可以理解为定语从句"which/that were scattered in the rooms"．
【高分句型三】
3．Tired as I was，I never felt so happy．
此处是由"as"作"尽管"用时构成的部分倒装句型，结构为"形容词+as+主语+谓语"，主句为"I never felt so happy"．

解答 I am an 18-year-old middle school student．I have been busy with my study and seldom helped my parents with the housework．Feeling quite sorry for that，I begin to think about what to do to help．【高分句型一】（做家务的理由）
Last Sunday，when my parents went out shopping，I suddenly got an idea：why not give the rooms a thorough cleaning？Firstly I collected all the books，newspapers and other things scattered in the rooms and put them in place．【高分句型二】Then I wiped the dust off all the furniture．After that，I swept and mopped the floors．（做家务的过程）
At this very moment，my parents came back and were quite surprised to see all the rooms tidy and floors shinning．My mother gave me a hug and I could see satisfaction in her eyes．Tired as I was，I never felt so happy．【高分句型三】（你的感受）

点评 提纲作文在写作时要注意内容是否包含了所有要点．写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次，平时需注意积累短语和重要句型．