Question

阅读下面的短文，然后按照要求写一篇150词左右的英语短文。

Mountain climbers around the world dream about going up Qomolangma, the highest mountain in the world. But many people who have climbed the mountain have left waste material that is harming the environment.

A team of Americans is planning the largest clean-up effort ever on Qomolangma. They will make the risky trip up the mountain next month.

The team of eight Americans will be guided by more than twenty Sherpas of Nepal(尼泊尔夏尔巴人). Their goal is to remove all the rubbish they see. They will spend two months cleaning up the mountain by gathering oxygen bottles, fuel containers, batteries, drink cans, human waste and all kinds of disposable products(一次性产品). They are expected to remove at least three tons of rubbish in large bags.

Team leader Robert Hoffman is making his fourth trip up the mountain. He says he hopes to bring Qomolangma to the condition it was in before the first successful climb fifty years ago. He says he hopes the effort will influence other people to clean up the environment closer home.

Disposable products on Qomolangma are a major concern. So the clean-up team will take along newly developed equipment to collect and treat disposable products. Over the years, the disposable products have polluted the mountain. In the warm season when the ice melts, the polluted water flows to Nepali villages below. The problem has gotten worse in recent years because climbing Qomolangma has become more popular.

【写作内容】

1．以约30个词概括短文内容要点；

2．以约120个词就 “Cleaning the World”这个主题写一篇短文，并包括如下要点：

（1）你所居住的地方周围存在怎样的环境问题？

（2）你认为这个问题是什么造成的？

（3）为帮助解决这一问题，你做了什么？

【写作要求】

    1.可以使用亲身经历或虚构的故事，也可以参照阅读材料的内容，但不得直接引用原文中的句子；

    2.作文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称

【评分标准】

概括准确，语言规范，内容合适，语篇连贯。

 

Answer 1

【答案】

Some Americans will spend two months cleaning up Qomolangma, which has been polluted by all kinds of rubbish, especially the disposable products. They hope their effort will urge other people to protect the environment. (34 words)

 I live near a main river of our city which is spotted with rubbish of different colors. Seriously polluted, the river fails to provide us with a spectacular view, but occasionally sends out an unpleasant smell with the wind, especially in hot summer. I think the large population and the factories on both sides of the river are mainly responsible for the serious situation. When taking a walk along the river, people throw rubbish into the river and even drop waste from the tall buildings without any consideration of the environment. Waste water from the factories poses an even greater threat to the river.

To improve the situation, I, with my friends, have formed an organization named “Saving Our Home” which is aimed at raising people’s awareness of environmental protection. Our members are now engaged in circulating knowledge among people on how to make our living conditions better by recycling, cutting down on the use of disposable products and dealing with rubbish in correct ways. We do hope our efforts will make a difference to our environment.

【解析】

试题分析：第一小题考查学生的分析概括能力。根据首段可知，登山者把垃圾丢在珠穆朗玛峰上，接着讲的是一支美国登山队决定花两个月的时间清理珠穆朗玛峰上的垃圾，以此来促使人们保护环境。

第二小题要求以“Cleaning the World”为主题，写一篇约120字的作文。作文要点已经给出，可以参照材料，但不能照抄材料。作文主要分三部分来写。即居住地的环境；现状的起因是什么；为改善环境，自己所做的努力。

【亮点说明】范文使用了fails to, provide us with, sends out, are responsible for, poses a threat to, raise awareness of, are engaged in, cutting down on, dealing with, in correct ways, make a difference等短语，使作文比较充实；范文使用Seriously polluted, but occasionally, especially等使描述的情况更加客观，有说服力；范文使用了定语从句which is spotted with rubbish和which is aimed at...；非谓语动词When taking a walk；不定式表目的To improve the situation等语法知识，显示出较强的语法功底。值得一提的是，范文使用do来表示强调，加强语气，比较出彩。

考点：材料类写作任务