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7．假如你叫李华，是一位高中生．随着科技的发展iPods已经成为中学生的新宠．用iPods既可以听音乐，阅读电子书，又可以玩电子游戏．请你用英语给某英语报社写一封信，谈谈中学生使用iPods的情况．信的内容包括以下几点：
    1．使用iPods对学习的好处．
    2．对课堂纪律和学习可能产生的负面影响．
    3．提出自己的建议并且说明理由．
    注意：词数120左右．
Dear Editor，
I'm a senior high school student，named Li Hua．____________________________________
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Answer 1

分析 本文是一篇提纲作文．根据所提供的材料信息，写一篇短文，写作要点包括：1．使用iPad对学习的好处；2．使用iPad对学生产生的负面影响；3．提出自己的建议并说明理由写作时人称以第一和第二人称为主，时态以一般现在时为主．
重点词汇：a number of （大量的）；Apparently（似乎，表面上）； be helpful to （对…有帮助）；What's worse（更糟糕的是）； make good use of （充分利用）；
高分句型：1．Using an iPad，we can listen to music，download a number of learning materials and read them on the screen．
句子的主语we与动词use存在逻辑上的主谓关系，现在分词形式using作伴随状语．
2．Some students，however，bring their iPads to classrooms and listen to music with earphones，which makes the teacher and other students greatly annoyed．
which引导一个非限制性定语从句，关系代词which指代上文提到的情况．
3．In my opinion，①as a student，we should make good use of iPads②to help achieve academic success．
①介词短语作状语；②不定式短语作目的状语．

解答 Dear editor，
I'm a senior high school student，named Li Hua．Now many students have iPads and think it's a fashion to use them．Using an iPad，we can listen to music，download a number of learning materials and read them on the screen（高分句型一）．Apparently，it is helpful to our study，especially to our English listening．（iPad的益处）
Some students，however，bring their iPads to classrooms and listen to music with earphones，which makes the teacher and other students greatly annoyed（高分句型二）．What's worse，some of them even waste precious time in class playing video games．（iPad对学习的影响）
In my opinion，as a student，we should make good use of iPads to help achieve academic success（高分句型三）．The classroom is a place for students to study，and therefore concentration is awfully needed for us to learn our lessons．Furthermore，the school should make a rule to guide the students to use iPads in a proper way．（作者建议）
Yours sincerely，
Li Hua

点评 提纲作文在写作时要注意内容是否覆盖了所给要点．写作时注意准确运用时态，使得上下文意思连贯，尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，使文章浅显易懂，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次．