Question

请仔细观察下面的图片, 按要求用英语写一篇100-120字的小短文.

要求: 1. 简述图片中的故事。
2. 图片中的故事传达了什么道理？
3. 谈谈你的看法.
词汇：烟斗tobacco pipe
One day Jack decided to_______________________________________________________
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Answer 1

One possible version：
One day Jack decided to kick the bad habit of smoking. So he threw his favorite tobacco pipe out of the window. Just at that time he seemed to regret what he did and hurriedly ran downstairs and out of the house, just in time to catch the pipe, smiling. Obviously he is still a heavy smoker. The humorous story try to convey the message that once determined, we should never stop to achieve our goal.
If we want to succeed in what we have promised, I think, it involves more about commitment and perseverance. Promises made in our life, like losing weight, giving up bad habits, or study hard, all require these two good qualities, which guarantee the successful fulfillment. Those who change their mind easily will find themselves often in a disappointing situation .

试题分析：本文是一篇图画作文。图画作文的写作模式一般是先描述图片内容，然后就此发表自己的观点和看法。本篇书面表达给出的图片内容是一个人看着手中的烟斗，然后把它从窗口仍了出去，后来又匆忙下楼去找，恰好烟斗被一个老太太给接到了。通过审图可以联想到的内容是：这个人想戒烟，但是意志不坚定，人们在成功的路上也需要有毅力，否则会一无所成。写作时要注意，描述图画部分时应该使用一般过去时，而发表议论部分则要使用一般现在时。而且在写作过程中要适当使用连接词和过渡句，以使文章内容衔接自然，语言连贯通顺，层次结构清晰。此外，还要尽量使用高级词汇和丰富的句式以提高文章档次。
【亮点说明】本篇范文分为两个自然段，在第一段中作者通过想象用简洁流畅的语言描述了图片的内容，比如Just at that time he seemed to regret what he did and hurriedly ran downstairs and out of the house, just in time to catch the pipe, smiling.，这些动作的描述非常形象生动，给人们一种恍若发生在眼前的感觉。在第二段中作者由此联想到自己生活中承诺的兑现，比如像减肥，改掉坏习惯，努力学习等等，这些目标和承诺的实现都需要毅力和决心。这些联想都非常贴近图画表达的中心，能够起到很好的论证作用。此外，在本段中作者还使用了状语从句If we want to succeed in what we have promised，定语从句which guarantee the successful fulfillment.等有效地丰富了文章的句式结构，增加了文章的亮点。