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16．随着中国人生活水平的提高，选择到国外去旅行已成为中国人盛行的度假方式之一．但是，有些中国旅行者的不文明行为却给广大的中国人丢尽了脸，如乱丢垃圾、在景区乱写乱画、在公共场所大声喧哗、大声接打手机、在飞机上大打出手等等．请以"Be a Civilized Chinese"为题目，写一篇英语稿件，投给China Daily．
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Be a Civilized Chinese
With the improvement of Chinese people's living standard，Be a Civilized Chinese
With the improvement of Chinese people's living standard，more and more people choose to travel abroad as a way of spending their holidays．
However，some tourists have uncivilized behavior when they are traveling abroad，which greatly makes all of us Chinese ashamed．For example，when they visit some world famous places of interest，they litter here and there．What's worse，some even carve their names on the trees or statues．Besides，some tourists talk loudly in public places with each other or on their mobile-phones．Worst of all，some passengers on board even fight against each other or with the air-hostesses just because of some inconvenience．These actions show the low quality of some tourists．
As far as I am concerned，it's the duty of every Chinese to protect the environment and public facilities，no matter where we are traveling．（高分句型一） Only in this way can we be civilized Chinese who will win respect from all over the world．（高分句型二）．

Answer 1

分析 高分句型一：
As far as I am concerned，it's the duty of every Chinese to protect the environment and public facilities，no matter where we are traveling．就我看来，无论我们身在何处，保护环境和公共设施是每个中国人的职责．
高分句型二：
Only in this way can we be civilized Chinese who will win respect from all over the world．
只有这样，文明的中国人才能赢得全世界的尊重．
句型一 ①As far as I am concerned，固定短语使用  ②no matter where we are traveling． no matter where 引导的让步状语从句
句型二  ①Only in this way can we be civilized Chinese该句为only位于句首修饰介词短语，句子用部分倒装
           ②who will win respect from all over the world 此句为who 作关系代词引导的定语从句

解答 one possible version                  
                                                        Be a Civilized Chinese
     With the improvement of Chinese people's living standard，more and more people choose to travel abroad as a way of spending their holidays．
     However，some tourists have uncivilized behavior when they are traveling abroad，which greatly makes all of us Chinese ashamed．For example，when they visit some world famous places of interest，they litter here and there．What's worse，some even carve their names on the trees or statues．Besides，some tourists talk loudly in public places with each other or on their mobile-phones．Worst of all，some passengers on board even fight against each other or with the air-hostesses just because of some inconvenience．These actions show the low quality of some tourists．
   As far as I am concerned，it's the duty of every Chinese to protect the environment and public facilities，no matter where we are traveling．（高分句型一） Only in this way can we be civilized Chinese who will win respect from all over the world．（高分句型二）

点评 本书面表达为应用文文体，该类作文往往有特定的表达方式，平时要注意积累符合文体使用特点的话．写作时力求语言准确、简洁，句子不宜过长．