Question

【题目】以下是一则关于中国姑娘蔡语婧在波士顿大学毕业演讲的报道，请就此写一篇150词左右的英语作文。

Chinese student praised for inspiring US graduation speech

Receiving her Master of Science in Math Finance from Boston University, Cai Yujing, who comes from Nanjing city east China’s Jiangsu Province, spoke about her hometown and family members present at the ceremony, and then shared her 6-year experience studying with students from different cultural backgrounds.

In her 7-minute speech, Cai talked about how she adapted to the diverse community at the Questrom School of Business and established mutual understanding with fellow students.

Overcoming awkwardness, nervousness, and even occasional anger when exchanging ideas with people from different countries, she said she also experienced the joy of sharing, inspiring and embracing each other, adding that such an experience opened her mind to learning about and embracing diversity.

Cai’s speech won a lot of praise online with some saying her address highlighted the positive perspective of Chinese students.

【写作内容】

1. 用约30个单词概述上述报道的主要内容；

2. 用约120个单词发表你的观点，内容包括：

（1）简要分析接纳和包容多元化的重要性（至少两点）；

（2）结合实例，谈谈在新环境中如何做到接纳和包容。

【写作要求】

1. 写作过程中不能直接引用原文语句；

2. 作文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称；

3. 不必写标题。

【评分标准】

内容完整，语言规范，语篇连贯，词语适当。

【参考词汇】包容accept v. 接纳 embrace v.

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Answer 1

【答案】Cai Yujing’s graduation speech has won widespread applause, in which she shared some of her experiences while studying abroad and emphasized the significance of accepting and embracing diversity.(28 words)

Personally, it is of critical importance to accept and embrace diversity. To begin with, undeniably, there exist various cultures, races and lifestyles worldwide. Acceptance of differences can help construct a harmonious atmosphere. Moreover, exposed to a new environment, we should adapt ourselves and fit in. Thus, shared understanding can be achieved and mutual learning can be promoted, which can enhance our personal growth.

Take myself as an example. On the first day of my high school, I felt nervous, surrounded by classmates with different academic and family backgrounds. But once I opened my mind, I overcame uneasiness and nervousness. We participated in class activities and learned from each other. In my mind, embracing diversity means opening a door to a happy life.(154 words)

【解析】本文属于读写任务写作，动笔前，一定要认真阅读原文，并理解内容。认真看清题目要求，这篇书面表达给了一段材料：先要求以约30个词概括上文的主要内容，本文主要讲述了一位中国女研究生在毕业典礼上的精彩演讲，她在演讲中强调了接受和接触多元文化的重要性。概括时注意要抓住文章的主题。然后再以约120个词写一篇短文，按照要点去表达，不能有遗漏，要注意题中所给的信息，不可偏题，要达到写作目的，切记不要忘记结合实例介绍，并要发表自己的观点。写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系。尽量使用自己会的单词、词组和句型，同时也要注意使用一些高级语法和句型，使自己的文章更有文采。注意条理要清晰，逻辑顺序和结构要恰当，同时要尽量保持简洁精干的内容，不拖泥带水。

【亮点说明】本文内容齐全，结构严谨，层次分明，布局合理，语言精练，同时运用高级句子、短语和词汇。第一段总结全文，使用了一个定语从句和一个状语从句，并使用了短语emphasized the significance和高级词汇embracing diversity，内容概括全面，准确表达了文章的中心思想。第二段首句使用了it作形式主语，不定式为真正主语，personally为评注性状语，同时应用了短语of+抽象名词。To begin with…, Moreover …thus…等过渡词的使用增强了文章的连贯性。Moreover, exposed to a new environment, we should adapt ourselves and fit in.使用了过去分词短语作状语，fit in等短语；Thus, shared understanding can be achieved and mutual learning can be promoted, which can enhance our personal growth.使用了动名词作主语和情态动词的被动语态以及which引导的非限制定语从句。On the first day of my high school, I felt nervous, surrounded by classmates with different academic and family backgrounds.使用了状语surrounded by classmates with different academic and family backgrounds，增强了句子的可读性。