Question

17．假定你是李华，你们学校最近开展了创建"平安校园"的活动．你们班为此组织主题班会，请你就如何创建"平安校园"在班会上谈谈你的想法．发言应包括下面的内容：
1．安全意识的重要性；
2．校内潜在的一些人身安全隐患，如：体育运动时，和同学发生矛盾时等情况．
3．你对解决这些问题的积极建议．
注意：
1．词数100左右；
2．文章开头已给出，不计入总词数．
注释：校园安全：safety at school 
My dear classmate，
    Whether our school campus is a safe place to stay on means a lot to both teachers and students．
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Answer 1

分析 本文是话题类提纲作文，根据所提供的材料信息，写一篇短文．学校最近开展了创建"平安校园"的活动，就如何创建"平安校园"在班会上谈谈自己的想法．
写作要点：1．安全意识的重要性； 2．校内潜在的一些人身安全隐患，如：体育运动时，和同学发生矛盾时等情况；3．你对解决这些问题的积极建议．
时态用一般现在时．人称以第一和第三人称为主．
重要短语：mean sth（意味着…），launch the campaign（发起活动），be aware that（所以），come first （位于第一名），get injured（有…问题），fall to the ground（摔倒在地…），get hurt（保护环境），have disagreement with…（，不同意…），cause sth（引起…），follow one's advice（听从某人的意见），solve the disagreement with…（解决分歧）．
【高分句型一】
1．Whether our school campus is a safe place to stay on means a lot to both teachers and students．
此处是由连接词"whether"引导的主语从句，整个句子的谓语动词为"means"，连词"whether"在主语从句意为"是否"．
【高分句型二】
2．And the campaign"safety at school"launched①recently will make us aware ②that safety should always come first③whatever we do．
①此处是由过去分词"launched"作名词"campaign"后置定语．
   ②此处是由连词"that"引导的宾语从句．
   ③此处是由疑问代词"whatever"引导的让步状语从句，疑问代词"whatever"在从句中作宾语．
【高分句型三】
3．When decorating our classroom standing on the desk，we might fall to the ground and get hurt．
此处为时间状语从句中的省略，结构为"When+现在分词"，主句为"we might fall to the ground and get hurt"．
【高分句型四】
4．I think，to follow our PE teachers'advice can avoid unnecessary injures in PE class．
此处为动词不定式作主语，句子的谓语动词为"can avoid"，"to follow our PE teachers'advice can avoid unnecessary injures in PE class"为动词"think"的宾语．
【高分句型五】
5．Besides，①quarrelling or even fighting is not a wise choice to solve the disagreement with our classmates②since it may bring suffering and pain to us mentally and physically．
    ①此处为"动名词"作主语，句子的谓语动词用单数．
      ②此处为连词"since"原因状语从句，主句为"quarrelling or even fighting is not a wise choice to solve the disagreement with our classmates"．

解答 Dear classmates，
 Whether our school campus is a safe place to stay on means a lot to both teachers and students．【高分句型一】And the campaign"safety at school"launched recently will make us aware that safety should always come first whatever we do．（安全意识的重要性）【高分句型二】
 Accidents can happen easily at school．When doing sports，we might get injured．When decorating our classroom standing on the desk，we might fall to the ground and get hurt．【高分句型三】When having disagreement with our classmates，we might quarrel and cause fighting．（潜在的一些人身安全隐患）
 So，I think，to follow our PE teachers'advice can avoid unnecessary injures in PE class．【高分句型四】And it will be helpful to have some students around when we have to do things on high places．Besides，quarrelling or even fighting is not a wise choice to solve the disagreement with our classmates since it may bring suffering and pain to us mentally and physically．【高分句型五】（建议）
 
 Thanks．

点评 提纲作文在写作时要注意内容是否包含了所有要点．写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次，平时需注意积累短语和重要句型．