Question

【题目】阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。

At first, Michael Surrell didn't see the black smoke or flames shooting from the windows of his neighbors' home. He and his wife had just parked around the corner from their own house in Allentown, Pennsylvania, when they got a call from one of his daughters: “The house next door is on fire! ” He went to investigate. That's when he saw a woman crying desperately on their porch.

“The baby' s in there! ” the woman cried. Though the fire department had been called, Surrell, then 64, instinctively ran inside. “The baby” was 8-year-old Tiara Roberts, the woman's granddaughter.

Entering the burning house was like “running into a bucket of black paint,” Surrell says. The thick smoke caused him to stumble blindly around, burned his eyes, and made it impossible to breathe. The conditions would have been dangerous to anyone, but for Surrell, who has chronic obstructive pulmonary disease （慢性阻塞性肺病）, they were life-threatening.

After a few minutes in the smoke-filled house, he retreated outside to catch his breath. Surrell knew he couldn't hold his breath for long. Taking a deep breath, he went in a second time. The darkness was overwhelming. Yet because the house had a similar layout （布局）to his, he found the stairs and made it to the second floor. He turned to the right and was met by intense heat. He was already out of breath.

His throat and lungs burned as if he'd breathed in fire instead of the smoke and soot in the air. Every blink stung his eyes. All he could hear was the crackling and popping of burning wood. Then a soft but distinct moan （呻吟声） emerged. Still unable to see, Surrell fell to his knees on the hot wood floor. He crawled toward the sound, feeling around for any sign of the girl.

注意：

1.所续写短文的词数应为150词左右；

2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；

3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；

4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。

Paragraph 1:

Finally, he touched something — a shoe, then an ankle.

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Paragraph 2:

Surrell woke up in the hospital a couple of days later.

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Answer 1

【答案】Paragraph1:

Finally, he touched something-a shoe, then an ankle. He pulled Tiara toward him. Her body was weak and she wasn't breathing. He hugged her into his arms and stood. He felt the heat of the flames on his cheeks. Turning, he fought through the smoke and ran blindly into the blackness. Surrell put Tiara down on the porch. He started CPR-the first time he' d ever done so. Soon she opened her eyes and took a breath on her own. Surrel's throat closed off.

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Surrell woke up in the hospital a couple of days later. He suffered severe burns to his windpipe and the upper portion of his lungs. He spent over a week in the hospital. The fire worsened Surrell' s pulmonary condition, and he feels the effects even two years later. As a result, he takes extra medication that helps open his airways. “It' s a small price to pay,” he says. “I' d do it again in a heartbeat. Wouldn't give it a second thought.”

【解析】

这是一篇记叙文。文章讲述了Michael Surrell家附近的一所房子着火了，邻居家的孙女被困火场，Michael Surrel虽然有慢性阻塞性肺病，但他还是义无反顾地冲进火场救出了邻居的孙女，自己也受伤了。文章续写第一段提到“Finally, he touched something — a shoe, then an ankle.”最终他摸到了一些东西——先是一只鞋，接着是脚踝。根据文章最后一段最后一句提到“He crawled toward the sound, feeling around for any sign of the girl.”他一直在寻找着女孩的踪迹，由此可以判断续写第一段应继续描写Michael Surrel找到女孩所做出的努力，以及找到女孩后的状态等。续写第二段则提到“Surrell woke up in the hospital a couple of days later.” Surrell是在医院中醒来的，说明Surrell受了非常严重的伤。第二段则可以描写Surrell救人后的心理活动等。

根据关键字判断情节发展。第一段介绍了故事发生的背景，“The house next door is on fire!”女儿打电话来说邻居家着火了。“He went to investigate.” Surrell到家后立刻去查看情况，此处就间接说明了他是一个热心的人。另外，第三段最后一句提到“but for Surrell, who has chronic obstructive pulmonary disease （慢性阻塞性肺病）, they were life-threatening.” Surrell是有慢性阻塞性肺病，对于健康人来讲，进火场救人都非常的危险，但Surrell还是义无反顾地去救人了，由此更能体现他的优秀品质，因此在续写中也需要体现。““running into a bucket of black paint,””提到失火的房子就像是一桶浓厚的黑色颜料，说明当时火势的凶猛，由此可以在续写中间接提到Surrell 救人时巨大的难度。“he went in a second time.”说明Surrell救人时难度非常大，但也说明了他凭着自己的毅力完成的救人的动作，由此也可以体现他热心助人的优秀品质。因此，在续写中也要对主人公品质的描写进行主题升华。