Question

Every one of us has shortcomings. However, what’s the most important is that we should recognize them and overcome them.

注意：①无须写标题，不得照抄英语提示语；

②除诗歌外，文体不限；

③文中不得透漏个人姓名和学校名称；

④词数不少于120。

 

 

 

 

 

Answer 1

One possible version：

As a saying goes．“Gold can’t be pure and man can’t be perfect．”As for me，I had a shortcoming--carelessness．

At one time，I handed in my test paper，but I forgot to write my name on it，for which I was criticized severely by my English teacher．Things like this happened to me many times．This made me realize that I must overcome this shortcoming．It was not easy for me to get rid of this bad habit．With others’ help，I overcame this shortcoming in the end．Now，whatever I do，I always do it carefully．

Therefore，don’t be afraid of your shortcomings．Admit them and overcome them，which is the most important．

【解析】

试题分析：题目要求根据英文提示写一篇短文。提示语的意思是“我们每个人都有缺点，然而，最重要的是我们应该承认错误并去客服它们。文章无须写标题，不得照抄英语提示语；内容要结合事例，文中不得透露个人姓名和学校名称。词数不少于120字，如引用提示语则不计入总数。

亮点说明：

范文一开头就引用格言“Gold can’t be pure and man can’t be perfect．”，然后自然地过渡到自己要讲的话题，很好的开头。另外，文中用了许多句型如but I forgot to write my name on it，for which I was criticized severely by my English teacher．及Admit them and overcome them，which is the most important．非限制性定语从句，whatever I do，I always do it carefully．宾语从句，以及句型It is adj. for sb. to do ,这些都显示了较高的运用英语语法知识的能力。

其次，范文也运用了许多固定短语：as for, at one time ,with sb’s help, be afraid of ;而且也注意使用but ,now ,therefore等衔接前后上下文，做到了语意连贯、衔接紧凑。这些都使文章达到了更高的水平。

考点：事例类作文