Question

11．请根据以下信息，为英语校报写一篇稿件，介绍你（李华）参加班级组织的徒步活动的情况．
介绍活动主要经过；
参加这项活动的感受（享受大自然，强身健体，学会互助，放松心情，利于学习）
要求：1）句子结构严谨，信息内容完整，篇章连贯．
2）字数100个字左右．开头已给出
Last Sunday，we went hiking．Early in the morning．we gathered at the school gate at 6 and headed for theSunshine Mountain．Our goal was to reach the top，so we could see the beautiful view．The hike was exhausting and the heat drained our energy．When we finally reached our destination，the whole view was breathtaking．
It was well worth the extra effort because we not onlygot relaxed by enjoying the beauty of nature but also we learned how to smoothaway difficulties，help each other as well as build ourbodies．
In the near future，we each will have our own mountain toclimb．Let's go forward and set a greater goal and aim at ahigher top of the mountain in our life．

Answer 1

分析 本文是一篇提纲作文．根据所提供的材料，写一篇稿件，介绍你参加班级组织的徒步活动的情况．写作要点包括：介绍活动主要经过；参加这项活动的感受（享受大自然，强身健体，学会互助，放松心情，利于学习）．写作时应以一般过去时和一般现在时为主．人称以第一人称和第三人称为主．重要短语：at the school gate （在校门口），headed for sp （前往某处），drain one's energy（耗尽某人的精力），be well worth…（很值得…），smooth away difficulties （消除困难）．

解答 Early in the morning，we gathered at the school gate at 6 and headed for theSunshine Mountain．Our goal was to reach the top，so we could see the beautiful view．【高分句型】The hikewas exhausting and the heat drained our energy．When wefinally reached our destination，the wholeview was breathtaking．（活动的经过）
It was well worth theextra effort because we not only got relaxed by enjoying the beauty of naturebut also we learned how to smooth away difficulties，help each other as well as build our bodies．【高分句型】（活动的感受：享受大自然，强身健体，学会互助，放松心情，有利于学习）
        In the near future，we each will have our own mountain toclimb．Let's go forward and set a greater goal and aim at ahigher top of the mountain in our life．（结尾---总结概括）

点评 提纲作文在写作时要注意内容是否包含了所有要点，并适当增加细节．写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次，平时需注意积累短语和重要句型．