Question

18．假如你是高中生李华，请根据以下要点，以日记的形式，叙述你在5月15日（周六）参加在乡下草莓采摘节（Strawberry-picking Festival）的活动情况．
你到达草莓园的方式，时间，及当时的天气状况；
你在草莓采摘节的所见所闻．
注意：日记格式已给出；词数120左右；可适当增加细节以使行文连贯
Saturday，May15                                               Sunny
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Answer 1

分析 这是一篇提纲类作文，我们需要用正确的英语把给出的要点表达出来．本作文中给出的要点不是很具体，故需要考生进行扩展，并准确表达．写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次．特别注意在选择句式时要赋予变化．
高分句型一：
Li Ming and I went to the countryside bybus to attend the Strawberry-picking Festival，which started at 8 o"clock inthe morning．
这句话用了非限制性定语从句，我和李明去了乡下坐车参加草莓采摘节，早上八点就开始了．
高分句型二：
While walking along the country road，wesaw the beautiful flowers and heard the birds singing．
这是状语从句的省略式，沿着乡间小路散步，我们看见美丽的花儿，听到小鸟在歌唱．

解答 Today，a sunny day，Li Ming and I went to thecountryside by bus to attend the Strawberry-picking Festival，which started at8 o"clock in the morning（高分句型一）．
When the organizer announced the rules of thefestival，we were led into the strawberry garden by beautiful girls in red，group by group．While walking along the country road，we saw the beautifulflowers and heard the birds singing（高分句型二）．The air was much fresher and cleaner thanthat in the city we are living in．During the festival，we enjoyed sweetstrawberries，watched some exciting performances and learned many stories aboutthe town and its kind people．At about five in the afternoon，we had to saygoodbye to the garden and went back home．Both Li Ming and I enjoyed ourselvesand hoped to visit the again soon．
What an unforgettable day!

点评 开放性作文给出一定的写作主题，并此为基础进行思维和联想，自由发挥．不仅考查学生在内容、结构安排、语言运用和组织方面的能力，而且对学生的想像力、发散思维、归纳判断能力也有很高的要求．