Question

英语课上，老师向同学们介绍了2013年度“最美孝心少年”的感人事迹，你深受感动。请你用英语写一则日记，写出自己的感受。

内容要点及要求：

1. 表明自己将向“孝心少年”学习；

2. 你将在日常生活、学习中做些什么来孝敬父母；

3. 词数：100左右。开头部分已给出，不计入总词数。

提示词（可选用）：learn from, respect, care for, do some housework, study hard

This morning, our English teacher told us some stories about “the most beautiful filial piety youth in 2013”.

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Answer 1

This morning, our English teacher told us some stories about “the most beautiful filial piety youth in 2013”. I was deeply moved by their stories. Those teenagers set us a good example in respecting and caring for parents.

I used to make my parents unhappy and they are always worried about me. Now I feel ashamed about it. I think I should learn from them. I will help do some housework and take good care of my mum and dad when they are ill. What’s more, I will try my best to study hard so that I can enter a better college. I hope I can become a filial piety youth like them. I am sure that my parents will be proud of me.

【解析】

试题分析：题目要求写一篇日记，谈谈听完“最美孝心少年”的感人事迹之后的感想。写作要点包括：向“孝心少年”学习；孝敬父母应做的事情这两个方面。词数在100词左右，开头不计入总词数；注意使用提示词；不要出现标点和拼写错误，尽量保持卷面整洁、字体美观；注意行文的连贯性。

亮点说明：范文涵盖了所有的写作要点，进行了适当的拓展，并注意语句的连贯性；范文还使用了目的状语从句、时间状语从句、宾语从句等语法知识，具备较强的语言运用能力。

语法方面：时间状语从句when they are ill；目的状语从句so that I can enter a better college；宾语从句①I can become a filial piety youth like them，②I should learn from them等，语法知识运用比较娴熟，显示了较强的语法功底，也使作文句式变得多样；

篇章结构方面：范文注意使用and, now, what’s more等来衔接句子和段落，使表达变得更有条理；

短语和搭配方面：范文使用了set sb a good example in, care for, used to do, be worried about, feel ashamed about, learn from, take good care of, try my best to do, be sure that, be proud of等短语和搭配，使作文的内容变得充实。

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