Question

 汤姆因在学校使用手机被学校处分，他感到很困惑，写信给你求助。请根据以下结构提示给汤姆回信。开头结尾已给出。
Beginning: Your letter reached me yesterday. It said in your letter that……..
Paragraph 1: 手机的优点：联系便捷
Paragraph 2: 带手机上学存在的问题：干扰教学，有害学习和健康
Ending: It is right for school to prevent you from using cell phones in school.

Answer 1

Your letter reached me yesterday. It said in your letter that you were punished for using cell phones, which puzzled you.
There is no doubt that cell phones can bring us much convenience. We can keep in touch with friends and families wherever we are. Besides, the cell phone is a way to have fun.
However, there are some problems with using cell phones. The ring of phones can disturb teachers and students in the class. It has been proved that using cell phones frequently does harm to health. Another problem is that some students can spend too much time and money on cell phones and sending messages, which will result in bad results in study.
As a student, you should concentrate on study. It is right for school to prevent you from using cell phones.

解析试题分析：考查提纲类书面表达：这是一篇提纲类作文，我们需要用正确的英语把给出的要点表达出来. 动笔前，一定要认真分析要点，理解要点要表达的含义，不能遗漏要点，跑题偏题。本作文中给出的要点比较具体,故需要准确表达.写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次。特别注意在选择句式时要赋予变化。平时除了加强词汇积累，写作联系以外，还可以适当记忆一些类似的范文，这样在考试中可以起到事半功倍的效果。
【亮点说明】范文中运用一些常见的短语keep in touch with与。。保持联系；does harm to对。。有害；spend time on sth在。。花费时间；result in 导致；concentrate on 集中精力于；There is no doubt that cell phones can bring us much convenience.这个句子中不仅仅用到there is no doubt that毫无疑问这个句型，还用到高级词汇convenience；Another problem is that some students can spend too much time and money on cell phones and sending messages, which will result in bad results in study.这个句子中that引导表语从句，which 引导非限制性定语从句；It is right for school to prevent you from using cell phones这个句子中it做形式主语；
考点： 提纲类作文