Question

【题目】假如你是高三学生李华，毕业后想去康奈尔大学（Cornell University）深造。请结合以下要点给康奈尔大学的负责人写一封电子邮件，希望获得奖学金。

1.自我介绍，包括英语水平、独立生活的能力以及与人沟通的能力；

2.希望获得奖学金；

3.希望得到答复。

注意：1.词数100左右，开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数；

2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。

Dear Sir or Madam,

I’m Li Hua._____________________________________________________________________________

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Yours sincerely,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Sir or Madam,

I’m Li Hua. I’m writing in the hope of obtaining a scholarship in Comell University for the bachelor’s degree.

As a straight A student, I have a good command of both science and arts, especially English. I’ve passed TOEFL with an excellent score. Apart from my outstanding academic achievements, I take part in various after-class activities to improve my social skills and broaden my horizons, thus preparing me for an independent life. Furthermore, child as I am, I’m willing to help other. All in all, I believe I have the appropriate qualifications and experience for my further study.

Thanks for your time and consideration. I’d appreciate it if my application could be approved of.

Yours sincerely,

Li Hua

【解析】试题分析：本文是一封申请书，重点是介绍自己的相关情况，性别，年龄，学习情况和特长；申请入学的理由大部分的要点都已经给出，考生要根据要求做适当的扩展，写作时注意以下几点：1.仔细阅读有关提示，弄清楚试题提供的所有信息，明确有哪些要点。2.提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内分析、构思和想象。3.根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态。4.注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点。

【亮点说明】

本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种句式和结构。运用apart from，thus, Furthermore, All in all之类词，让语句结构富有逻辑。此外，文章还使用了大量短语in the hope of，have a good command of，take part in，broaden my horizons, be approved of等。child as I am, I’m willing to help other.as引导的让步状语从句使用经典；I’d appreciate it if my application could be approved of.此处it是形式宾语，if条件句是真正的宾语。