Question

【题目】第二节：短文写作（共1题；满分30分)

请根据以下提示，并结合事例，用英语写一篇短文。

People are always looking for someone to look up to and imitate. You can set the example by becoming the person that people want to be like. You can help change the world by changing yourself.

注意：①无须写标题；

②除诗歌外，文体不限；

③内容必须结合你生活中的一个事例；

④文中不得透露个人姓名和学校名称；

⑤词数不少于120，如引用提示语则不计入总词数。

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Answer 1

【答案】

Such is human nature that people tend to look for an idol in their life, holding the belief that they can become better by following the example of their idol. However, we can set the example by changing ourselves and becoming the person we want to be.

I can’t help recalling the time when I first entered high school. Having failed the entrance exam, I was admitted to an ordinary high school, which disappointed me a lot. I was very bitter and rude, looking down upon everyone at school. Then one day I told myself I couldn’t be like this any longer. Maybe I shouldn’t look for someone to admire but should change myself first. I tried to improve myself a bit and tried to be friendlier to others. As a result, I found myself a lot happier and I was even awarded the title of “Excellent Student” at the end of term.

Life is a constant exercise in self-improvement. Changing yourself to a better self is definitely better than looking for someone better to imitate. Change yourself, and you will make the earth a better world day by day.

【解析】范文主题明确、行文连贯、语言流畅。范文段落安排非常合理。第一段直接切入主题，与所给提示相呼应。第二段按照写作要求，结合自己的亲身事例来来证明第一段的观点。最后一段再次点明主题。范文句式搭配长短结合，应用较多语法结构，如第一段第一句应用了such…that位于句首的部分倒装结构；第二段第一、句使用了定语从句the time when。第二句应用了非谓语动词和, which引导的定语从句。有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑，如However, As a result等。