Question

假如你叫李华，你的同学王明总是说因为学习忙而没有时间锻炼，最近天气变化快，他生病了，请你根据下列要点给他写封建议信：
1．冬去春来，万物复苏，细菌也繁殖旺盛，抵抗力差的人容易生病。
2．锻炼能增强体质，并能使头脑清醒；锻炼一两个小时，学习效果会更好；
有了强健的体格，学习时就不容易感到疲劳，也不易被疾病侵袭；
3．锻炼跟学习同样重要，要坚持每天锻炼一小时。
注意：（1）短文须包括上述要点，应适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；
（2）词数：100左右。短文开头已给出（不计词数）。
Dear Wang Ming,
I am sorry to hear that you have been ill for days and hope you are better now.
Best wishes !
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua

Answer 1

Dear Wang Ming,
I am sorry to hear that you have been ill for days and hope you are better now.
As is known to us all, spring is the best season of growing. It is such a refreshing time that we are filled with the hope and promise. Yet it is also the best time for the bacterium, so we should take care and exercise more especially when we are busy and hard-working, which means more outdoor activities. You are always saying that you have studied so hard that you had no time for exercise. This is harmful to your health. I feel it would be more beneficial to your health if you could take more exercise in future.
Exercise can improve your physical health and refresh your mind. After one or two hours of exercise you can study better. Only when you have a strong body can you keep on studying without feeling tired. Otherwise your study will be interrupted from time to time by sickness.
Exercise is as useful and important as your study. I hope you can take at least one hour’s exercise every day after you are recovered .
Best wishes !
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua

解析试题分析：这是一篇提纲作文。要求根据要点写封建议信，做题前一定要认真分析要点，理解要点要表达的含义。这篇作文的要点是以提纲列出的，而且很详细，考生要做的是将要点全面的合理的解释清楚，应该注意适当增加细节以使行文连贯，比如适当选用表示因果、递进、转折关系的连接词，使文章流畅、通顺，并避免因反复使用句式相同的简单句而造成的单调感。多使用高级词汇和重点句型。
【亮点说明】范文使用了一些高级的短语和各种多变的句式：be filled with 充满了，be harmful to对…有害， from time to time 时而，As is known to us all, spring is the best season of growing. 这句话使用了as引导的非限制性定语从句，It is such a refreshing time that we are filled with the hope and promise. 这句话使用了it做形式主语，Yet it is also the best time for the bacterium, so we should take care and exercise more especially when we are busy and hard-working, which means more outdoor activities.这句话使用了when引导的时间状语从句，which引导的非限制性定语从句， You are always saying that you have studied so hard that you had no time for exercise. 这句话使用了宾语从句和so…that…句型， I feel it would be more beneficial to your health if you could take more exercise in future.这句话使用了if引导的状语从句， Only when you have a strong body can you keep on studying without feeling tired. 这句话使用了倒装句。
考点：考查提纲类书面表达