Question

为了了解目前我国高中阶段师生关系的现状，BBC UK China 网站互动专区推出“高中师生关系大家谈”英文栏目。假如你叫李华，一名高三的学生，想给该栏目发帖。内容包括以下要点：

1.你校师生关系和睦；

2.你与老师的关系如何（如常向老师请教，互相交流等）；

3.师生关系如何建立提出自己的看法。

注意：1.   可根据要求加以必要发挥，但不要逐字翻译；

2.   词数100左右。

 

Answer 1

【答案】

 

Generally , the teachers and students are in good relationship in which we respect each other in our school. As for me, I’m quite willing to share my thoughts with my teachers. Whenever I have any difficulty, I’d like to turn to my teachers , and they always show love and concern for me and give me strong support and good advice.

In my opinion , teachers and students should enjoy an equal relationship. To build a relationship of this kind, teachers should become friends of students while students ought to place more trust in their teachers. Thus we could exchange ideas freely and both teachers and students would benefit from such a warm relationship.

【解析】

试题分析：本篇书面表达是要求给网站发帖，内容要求贴近学生生活，学生应该很容易把握。考生在写作之前必须认真审题，首先要注意文章的时态，要求介绍自己学校师生以及自己与老师的关系情况，所以要用一般现在时，建议部分可以用一般将来时；当然也必须用第一人称。写作时不要根据材料逐字翻译，应该注意细节的补充以及连接词的使用和句式的变化，以提高作文的档次。

【亮点说明】范文脉络清楚，要点全面。介词短语，不定式短语和插入语的使用使得文章结构更为紧凑，比如As for me,；In my opinion；To build a relationship of this kind,等；文中多种句式和复合句的运用也使得范文亮点纷呈，比如：定语从句in which we respect each other in our school；让步状语从句Whenever I have any difficulty；并列句while students ought to place more trust in their teachers.总之，是一篇值得借鉴的好文章。

考点：提纲作文，考查考生的语言组织能力。