Question

请根据以下内容写一篇文章介绍中国科学家钱学森。

1.1911年生于上海，1935年赴美留学，成绩优异，受到当时的著名科学家冯·卡门(Von Karman)的赞誉；

2.1938年在美国获航空、数学博士学位；

3.1950年获悉新中国成立的消息，克服了美国政府的百般阻挠，于1955年回到祖国；

4.1958年起长期担任航空航天研究工作，为新中国的航天事业做出巨大的贡献，被誉为“新中国航天之父”；5.2009年于北京去世。

获博士学位： obtain one’s doctor’s degree

航天科技 : aerospace science and technology

为......做出巨大的贡献: contribute a lot to...

中国的航天事业:the cause of China’s areospace

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Answer 1

Qian Xuesen, regarded as the father of China’s space program, was born in 1911 in Shanghai.

In 1935, Qian went to America for further study and was highly thought of by Von Karman because of his great achievements. In 1938, he obtained his doctor’s degree in aerospace science and mathematics in the US. In 1950, he heard New China had been founded and succeeded in coming back to his homeland in 1955 though the American government tried to stop him. Since 1958 he had been devoted to aerospace science and technology and contributed a lot to the cause of China’s aerospace and in 2009, he passed away in Beijing.

Because of the love for his country and the great achievements, he has received the respect and admiration from his people.

【解析】

试题分析：对于介绍人生平的文章，注意条理要清晰，可以用表示时间的关联词，如in 1911，two years later,after three years,when he was 50 years old等等。注意变换时间叙述的形式，不要一直用在某某年份。同时注意文中所给的信息，不可遗漏，可以多进行一些补充，尽量保持卷面整洁，字体美观，注意行文的连贯性。时态：用一般现在时。结构上：可采取总分总模式。尽量使用一些高级句型和词汇提升作文档次。【亮点说明】1、文章脉络结构清晰，整体框架严密。形式完整，采用总分总形式。首段介绍钱的出生、第二段记叙生平经历、第三段升华总结，使文章更有条理。2、运用较多高级短语，避免文章陷入平庸的分数段，如：was highly thought of （而不是praiseed）、great achievements（而不是success）、obtained his doctor’s degree(obtain而不是get) 、succeeded in coming back、contributed a lot to（而不是devoted to） 、received the respect and admiration from（用admiration而不是love），使文章更加生动，所以考生要在平时注重积累，争取能把高级词汇或者短语运用到自己的文章中去。3、变换句型，注重时态。如首段的定语从句Qian Xuesen, regarded as the father of China’s space program, was born in 1911 in Shanghai. ，给读者耳目一新的感受，体现了作者高超的遣词造句能力，使读者有读下去的兴趣。全篇用一般过去时，同时在个别句子中运用过去完成时，如Since 1958 he had been devoted to aerospace science使文章更有水平。

考点：考查材料型作文写作