Question

10．假定你叫李华，是一位兼职教师，你所任教的学校里有很多儿童严重超重．你就此给某报编辑写信，给孩子的家长一些忠告．内容包括：
1，应该更加关注孩子的健康．
2，帮助孩子养成良好的饮食习惯．
3，鼓励孩子们多运动，并参加一些有益的课外活动（out-of-class activities）
注意，信的开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数．词数110左右．
Dear Editor，
I am a part-time teacher in a primary school．Recently I've been worried to find more and more children in school are overweightThis is very bad for their health．So I'm writing to give their parents some advice as follows．
All the parents are caring much about their children's life and studies，but I think they should pay more attention to their children's health．（高分句型一）So it is very important for them to offer their children balanced diets，because healthy eating can not only provide children with enough energy for them to grow up but also keep them healthy．（高分句型二）They should help their children to stay away from junk food．In addition，they ought to encourage their children to help them with some housework，take some exercise every day and take part in some out-of-class activities which can benefit the children．（高分句型三）
I look forward to seeing all the children growing up healthily．
Yours
LiHua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于提纲类作文，根据提示信息假定你叫李华，是一位兼职教师，你所任教的学校里有很多儿童严重超重．你就此给某报编辑写信，给孩子的家长一些忠告，写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，要点包括：应该更加关注孩子的健康．帮助孩子养成良好的饮食习惯．鼓励孩子们多运动，并参加一些有益的课外活动（out-of-class activities）2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态．4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：be bad for 对…有害；pay more attention to多关注；balanced diets平衡饮食；not only，but also不仅，而且；In addition另外；look forward to盼望；
   All the parents are caring much about their children's life and studies，but I think they should pay more attention to their children's health．（高分句型一）
So it is very important for them to offer their children balanced diets，because healthy eating can not only provide children with enough energy for them to grow up but also keep them healthy．（高分句型二）
In addition，they ought to encourage their children to help them with some housework，take some exercise every day and take part in some out-of-class activities which can benefit the children．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear Editor，
       I am a part-time teacher in a primary school．Recently I've been worried to find more and more children in school are overweight．This is very bad for their health．So I'm writing to give their parents some advice as follows．
       All the parents are caring much about their children's life and studies，but I think they should pay more attention to their children's health．（高分句型一）So it is very important for them to offer their children balanced diets，because healthy eating can not only provide children with enough energy for them to grow up but also keep them healthy．（高分句型二）They should help their children to stay away from junk food．In addition，they ought to encourage their children to help them with some housework，take some exercise every day and take part in some out-of-class activities which can benefit the children．（高分句型三）
       I look forward to seeing all the children growing up healthily．
                                                                    Yours，
                                                                    Li Hua

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．