Question

15．谈谈你对"It is a healthy diet，regular exercise as well as a large amount of sleep that are really important．"这句话的看法．
字数要求：100词左右．
                                                                                  

Answer 1

分析 这是一篇话题类作文，谈谈你对"It is a healthy diet，regular exercise as well as a large amount of sleep that are really important．"这句话的看法．所以首先必须读懂这句话，并且要用第一人称来写．写作时不能只是生硬的写出这句话的意思，一定要结合实际，举例说明自己的理解．需要注意不要偏离文章中心，写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，一定要契合作文的主题，不能出现文章脱节问题．尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次．同时注意题目要求100词左右，不能写太多，也不能写太少，适中即可．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：
With the living conditions improving，more attention is paid to health．（高分句型一）句中使用了with的复合结构
First，exercise not only builds up your strength but also shapes your body．（高分句型二）句中使用了not only…but also…不仅…而且…
What's more，you should develop a balanced eating habit and avoid food which contains too much fat．（高分句型三）句中使用了what's more而且；
So we should eat healthily，exercise regularly and sleep properly so that we can become healthy，wealthy and wise．（高分句型四）句中运用了so that引导的结果状语从句

解答 With the living conditions improving，more attention is paid to health．（高分句型一）（点明话题）There are many effective ways to improve your health state．First，exercise not only builds up your strength but also shapes your body．（高分句型二）By working out regularly，you will feel relaxed and increase the ability to concentrate on studies．What's more，you should develop a balanced eating habit and avoid food which contains too much fat．（高分句型三） So you'd better make a careful decision about what to eat．Last but not least，a good amount of sleep is also important to your health．Being much too tired makes it easy for you to get sick．Worse still，loss of sleep can cause you to put on weight easily．（提出解决办法）
     So we should eat healthily，exercise regularly and sleep properly so that we can become healthy，wealthy and wise．（高分句型四）（发表个人观点）

点评 本文属于话题类作文，动笔前，一定要认真分析要点，理解要点要表达的含义，不能遗漏要点，跑题偏题．平时除了加强词汇积累，写作联系以外，还可以适当记忆一些类似的范文，这样在考试中可以起到事半功倍的效果．