Question

12．假定你是李华，计划组织一次郊游，请给你的英国朋友Chris写封邮件邀请他参加．内容包括：
1．参加者；
2．时间、地点；
3．活动：登山、野餐等．
注意：
1．词数80左右；
2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯．
Dear Chris，
I am sincerely inviting you to join us to go for an outing this weekend．Aiming to enhance our relation and build up our bodies，the trip involves climbing mountains and a picnic．（高分句型一）（活动：登山、野餐等）As is scheduled，the activity will take place at 8：00am on Saturday at the gate of our school and we hope all the students in our class will take an activite part in it．（高分句型二）（参加者、时间、地点）Climbing is an important part of the trip．While pushing our strength to the limit，we are also breathing fresh air and appreciating the gorgeous scenery on the way．（高分句型三）
Hope you won't miss the joyful activity．Your attendance is greatly expected．
Yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于提纲类作文，根据提示信息计划组织一次郊游，请给你的英国朋友Chris写封邮件邀请他参加，写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，明确几个要点：参加者；时间、地点；活动：登山、野餐等．2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态；就本文而言应该用一般现在时态．4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】文章开头：表明写信目的，可套用句式如"I am cordially/sincerely inviting you to join us …．
　　文章中间：描述活动信息（时间/地点/参与者/活动内容/活动目的或意义）．
　　①目的引出句，可使用非谓语句式，如"Aiming to（套用亮点词，如增进联系enhance relationship/强身健体build up bodies），the trip involves …"；
　　②时间、地点的引出句，如"As is scheduled，the activity will take place …"．
　　③活动内容适当增加细节，根据所给关键词扩写成句．如，"爬山是这次出游的重要环节．在挑战体力的同时，我们能呼吸新鲜的空气，领略到沿途美丽的风光．"Climbing is an important part of the trip．While pushing our strength to the limit，we are also breathing fresh air and appreciating the gorgeous scenery on the way．
　　文章结尾：再次欢迎对方参加．可套用句式如，"Hope you won't miss the joyful activity．Your attendance is greatly expected．"

解答 Dear Chris，
      I am sincerely inviting you to join us to go for an outing this weekend．Aiming to enhance our relation and build up our bodies，the trip involves climbing mountains and a picnic．（高分句型一）（活动：登山、野餐等）As is scheduled，the activity will take place at 8：00 am on Saturday at the gate of our school and we hope all the students in our class will take an activite part in it．（高分句型二）（参加者、时间、地点）Climbing is an important part of the trip．While pushing our strength to the limit，we are also breathing fresh air and appreciating the gorgeous scenery on the way．（高分句型三）
      Hope you won't miss the joyful activity．Your attendance is greatly expected．
                                                                                                                                                                                                                                     Yours，
                                                                                                                                                                                                                                      Li Hua

点评 提纲类在写作时要注意内容是否包含了所有要点，写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次，平时需要积累短语和重要句型．