Question

14．假设你是张华，你的朋友李明在骑车上学的途中遇到车祸，腿受伤并在医院接受了手术．请你代表全班同学给他写一封慰问信，表达以下几点信息：
1 听说他住院并接受了手术，表示慰问；2、你们将在周六上午去看望他；3、将会帮助他补习所缺的功课；4、愿意提供任何可能的帮助．
文章必须包含以上要点，词数为100～120．

Answer 1

分析 本文是一篇慰问信．主要讲述了张华代替全班同为为受伤住院的朋友李明写的一封慰问信．首先注意文章的书写格式，这是一篇信件类的文章，对格式有一定要求：开头顶个写称谓，另起一行空两格写正文，最后一段写祝愿，最后落款．其次就是理解文章的大意，对文章的脉络进行概括，然后书写．
从大题中可知，本文主要是站在李华的角度上代替全班同学为李明写一封慰问信．其次，根据题目中给的要点，拟写文章的段落大纲，进行书写．本文主要分成三个部分：第一部分是同学们送上的祝福，第二部分是告知李明将会去看望他，第三部分就是表明同学们会为李明提供一切可以的帮助．文章的段落清晰，用词简洁大方．值得同学们借以参考．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达．knock down撞到；be patient有耐心的；be  ready to准备好
We were shocked when we heard that you were knocked down by a truck while cycling to school．（高分句型）
We are sorry to have learned that you have had an operation on your injured leg and that you have to stay in hospital．（高分句型）

解答 Dear Li Ming，
   How are you now？All of us are worried about you．We were shocked when we heard that you were knocked down by a truck while cycling to school．（高分句型）We are sorry to have learned that you have had an operation on your injured leg and that you have to stay in hospital．（高分句型）Let us hope that it will be for only a very short time，and that you will soon be out of hospital．Everybody here sends his best wishes to you for a quick recovery．
   We'll come to see you on Saturday morning．We have decided to help you with your lessons that you have missed．So，don't worry and be patient．If there is anything we can do for you，please let us know when we come．（高分句型）We are always ready to help you．
   Hope you will recover soon．
                                                           Yours，
                                                           Zhang Hua

点评 应该注意适当增加细节以使行文连贯，比如适当选用表示因果、递进、转折关系的连接词，使文章流畅、通顺，并避免因反复使用句式相同的简单句而造成的单调感．（1）认真审题，确定体裁． （2）构思要点．根据题目要求，理解要表达的要点．设计好文章的层次段落，考虑所用时态、人称等，把要点串联起来，构成文章框架．（3）选词造句，避难选易．（4）认真检查，避免错误．仔细阅读全文，查找是否有错，注意时态、单词拼写、字母大小写、标点是否有误，句式是否正确．逻辑是否一致．