Question

【题目】假定你是李华，得知你的外国笔友Peter跟你谈论“中国梦” 个话题。她来信问你的梦想，请用英语给她写封回信。主要内容包括：

1.对梦想的理解；

2.你的人生梦想；

3.如何实现你的梦想。

注意：1.词数100左右；

2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。

Dear Peter,

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Yours,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Peter,

I am writing to share with you my dream. Our homeland dreams to restore the former glory, which inspires me to recall my dream—to become a doctor, saving lives and shouldering the burden of low-expense medical treatment for distant poor villagers.

Being a motivation and goal, dreams make us determined, diligent and devoted as well as making life more meaningful. However, it is often the case that we are faced with a lot of difficulties on the way to success. Therefore, giving full play to strengths and minimizing weaknesses in current preparation for the college entrance exam is my first challenge to face consciously. Also, I am fully convinced that sparing no efforts to study will contribute a lot.

I am curious about yours and reply to me soon.

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】首先审题，用英语写封回信，谈论中国梦。任务中给出的提示信息包含如下内容：1.对梦想的理解；2.你的人生梦想；3.如何实现你的梦想。抓住了这亮点，我们就抓住了文章的核心内容。注意写信的格式和用语。其次选用正确的人称和时态，考虑用一般现在时，第一人称来写。然后写出单个句子，使用正确的连词，连句成段。具体来说，写这篇文章时，要注意：1、提示中的内容比较泛泛，需要适当补充；2、为使文章层次清楚，可分三个自然段写：第一自然段说明自己对“中国梦”的理解；第二自然段具体说明自己的梦想是什么；第三自然段说明实现自己梦想的具体规划。这篇文章对于考生的综合能力要求较高，要求考生有很强的谋篇布局的能力和组织要点的能力。需要注意紧扣文章主题，给出的要点都需要包括，缺一不可。写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，不能出现文章脱节问题。尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次。

【亮点说明】本篇书面表达要点全面，结构紧凑，是一篇较好的范文。这篇短文使用了大量的短语，为文章增色不少，如: share with分享，be faced with面对。还使用了定语从句Our homeland dreams to restore the former glory, which inspires me to recall my dream和宾语从句Also, I am fully convinced that sparing no efforts to study will contribute a lot.等多种句式结构，增加了文章的可读性。