Question

近日你的外国朋友Mike写信向你咨询H7N9禽流感的事情并询问该如何预防禽流感，请你根据以下信息写信告诉他:

H7N9禽流感是一种禽类传染疾病，症状是高热、咳嗽和呼吸困难, 但可防可治：

1. 勤洗手;

2. 每天打开门窗通风一到两次；

3. 不要接触病的或病死的家禽和畜类,肉类一定要煮熟后吃；

4. 经常锻炼身体，增强个人体质；

5. 有症状时及时就医。

【写作要求】

只能使用5个句子表达全部内容。回信的开头与结尾已给出，不计入5个句数内。

【参考词汇】

传染infect  禽类 poultry  畜类cattle   咳嗽 cough

Dear Mike,

I am glad to hear from you again. In your last letter, you asked me about H7N9 avian influenza and how to prevent ourselves falling into such a disease. Now let me tell you something about it. ___________________________________________________________     ______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Best wishes to you!

                                                        Yours,

                                                              Li Hua

 

Answer 1

【答案】

Dear Mike,

I am glad to hear from you again. In your last letter, you asked me about H7N9 avian influenza and how to prevent ourselves falling into such a disease. Now let me tell you something about it. H7N9 avian influenza is a disease spreading among poultry, but it is also a disease which can be prevented. First of all, we should form a good habit of washing hands. Secondly, we should open the windows and doors for fresh air once or twice a day. Thirdly, do not have a close contact with sick poultry or cattle and also keep away from poultry or cattle that have died of diseases; besides, meat can not be eaten until it is fully cooked. Last but not the least, we should take exercise from time to time to build up our bodies and see the doctor as soon as possible if we have the symptoms of high fever, cough and breathing difficulty.

Best wishes to you!

                                                        Yours,

                                                              Li Hua

 

【解析】

试题分析：考生首先要仔细审题，包括以下几个方面：（1）层次结构，（2）句子的时态（3）内容要点。尤其是内容要点要把握准确到位，这是提纲作文，要点需要考生拿捏准确以及正确，考生要注意尽可能使句子的表达形式多样化，适当的使用一些高级句式和高级词汇，以提高书面表达的档次和可读性。因为只能使用5个句子表达全部的内容。又要包括所有的要点，考生要多使用复杂句，一句话中多包含些信息，如范文里面的句子：we should take exercise from time to time to build up our bodies and see the doctor as soon as possible if we have the symptoms of high fever, cough and breathing difficulty.就包含了几个要点内容。

考点：提纲作文。

点评：作文要层次清晰，要点全面，表达流畅，切合作文要求，句子结构准确，信息内容完整，篇章结构连贯。文中使用一些极佳的词语和句子为文章增色，使用高级词汇及句型。