Question

【题目】假设你是Tom，你的美国笔友Mike来信说他父母因为工作原因，全家搬到了一个新城市。他现在每天除了上课就是在家上网，几乎没有朋友，感觉很孤独。请你给他写一封信，劝他别封闭自己，多结交朋友，参加社会活动（social activities）等。

注意：1. 词数100字左右。（开头已给出，但不计入总词数）2.可适当增加细节。使行文连贯。

Dear Mike,

I know it’s hard to start a new life in a strange city. ____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

Yours,

Tom

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Mike,

I know it’s hard to start a new life in a strange city. However, just staying at home doing nothing but surf the Internet is not good for you. You’d better go out and join in some social activities, such as playing sports, going camping and so on. By doing this, you can get to know more people around. And it would be a good idea to help others if possible and show them you are open and friendly as well. With time going on, people will know you better and like to make friends with you, so you won’t feel lonely anymore.

Hope things will turn better for you.

Yours

Tom

【解析】本文是一篇邮件类作文。本文要求考生以Tom的名义给美国笔友Mike写一封信，劝他别封闭自己，多结交朋友，参加社会活动（social activities）等。考生在成文时应注意：合理发挥想象力，使文章的表达自然，丰满。文章的写作要点要齐全：（1）. 劝他别封闭自己，并注意说明封闭自己的坏处；（2）. 多结交朋友，最好说一下如何结交朋友；（3）. 参加社会活动，并说明参加社会活动的好处。注意文章的人称：以第二人称为主。时态：一般现在时。注意使用高级词汇和句型，以提高文章的档次；恰当使用一些连词、插入语，使文章表达自然，流畅。

【范文亮点】

本文详略得当，运用了高级词汇和高级句式。如高级词汇：had better，By doing，With time going on。高级句式：①staying at home doing nothing but surf the Internet is not good for you.非谓语结构；②And it would be a good idea to help others if possible and show them you are open and friendly as well. 运用了it be+名词 to do结构。