Question

【题目】假设你是李华，你的叔叔最近因为吸烟而得了肺病。请你根据以下要点提示给他写一封信劝他戒烟。

1．想吸烟的时候，可以试着喝些水或吃些健康的小吃；

2．远离平时经常一起吸烟的朋友。

注意：1.词数100左右；

2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。

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Answer 1

【答案】Dear Uncle,

I'm sorry to know that you are ill. We all know smoking does great harm to our health, and I think you'd better give up smoking as soon as possible. Firstly, whenever you want to smoke, try drinking some water or eating some healthy snacks. Secondly, maybe you have some friends who often smoke with you. Stay away from them.

My father used to smoke heavily and once had a serious lung disease, but now he has given up smoking and is living a healthy life. So give up smoking right now. I hope you will do it!

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】本篇书面表达属于应用文，要求写一封信。

第1步：根据提示可知，本篇为一封信，要求给患有肺病的叔叔写一封信劝他戒烟。时态应为一般现在时。

第2步：根据写作要求，确定关键词（组），如：do harm to，give up，try doing sth，stay away from等。

第3步：根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。

第4步：连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰，保持整洁美观的卷面是非常重要的。

【亮点说明】

范文内容完整，语言规范，语篇连贯，词数适当。作者在范文中使用了较多高级表达方式，如状语从句whenever you want to smoke, try drinking some water or eating some healthy snacks.定语从句maybe you have some friends who often smoke with you等。全文中没有中国式英语的句式，显示了很高的驾驭英语的能力。另外，文章思路清晰、层次分明，上下句转换自然，为文章增色添彩。